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Rainy Days and Raindrops

The clouds of September come calling again
Filled with reminders and days filled with rain
The gas bill needs paying the electric is due
They're pinned to the fridge with the other bills too.

The skies are so dark on these September days
They skip past so quickly to be on their way
I wonder at times will it ever be clear
As my thoughts linger briefly then soon disappear.

The windows need cleaning they're covered with dust
The verandah needs sweeping but I'm not really fussed
I've been waiting and waiting, but I'm not really sure
Guess I'll just wait and see before opening my door.

[CHORUS]
With these rainy days and raindrops
That fill up my life
Clouds filled up to the brim
Suddenly burst as if cut with a knife
And the rain comes down falling
It seems like days without end
These rainy days and raindrops
Wash away the memories again...

Put the kettle on the stove
We'll have a pot of tea
And a plate of freshly baked biscuits
We can pass the time just you and me.

While the rain falls on window sills
It won't get us here by the fire
As we watch the raindrops falling
Streaking the panes like church spires.

In these days of September watching rainy skies
From the warmth of the parlour so nice and dry
Another day passes by us without saying goodbye
Like the clouds filled with raindrops they fly.

[CHORUS]
With these rainy days and raindrops
That fill up my life
Clouds filled up to the brim
Suddenly burst as if cut with a knife
And the rain comes down falling
It seems like days without end
These rainy days and raindrops
Wash away the memories again...

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  • rosie4491
    July 27, 2008
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    I can't explain what I think of this poem. It's interesting and captivating. But something about it just pushes me away from it.. perhaps it's the lyrical form. I'm not sure. It's an excellent write. But not quite what I want for this contest. Best of luck.

    Keep it up =]


  • Renegade Theory
    April 2, 2008

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    Very nice. You had a beautifully executed rhyme scheme; everything melded together and that's always commendable. I liked the idea of bundling up and just staying indoors through the Autumn "blahs." The touch of humor at the beginning about the bills needing to be paid was also nice. Best of luck. -R.T


  • ForeverNightMusic
    February 28, 2008

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    imagery

    i love love love it !
    my favorite part is >>>

    While the rain falls on window sills
    It won't get us here by the fire
    As we watch the raindrops falling
    Streaking the panes like church spires

    thanks for entering
    and good luck
    morgan


  • McRae by nature
    October 1, 2007
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    Great write. Thanks for the entry.

    Carrie


  • Twilight4Eternity
    July 10, 2007

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    A very interesting poem based on memories. Once again nice flow and rhyme. I hope you do well in the contest.


  • bruntbeauty
    July 10, 2007
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    I loved this but it does need an option number in the notes.

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