Sitting on the old tire swing on our tree
In the dense forest of our youth
The tire swing, where we first met
When I cursed you with cooties, that first summer,
And you told me we would get married
Rocking on the old tire swing of our summers,
That we would always sit opposite each other,
Where impossible worlds and creatures were real,
And tell our deepest secrets,
And swear that we would only trust each other forever
Vines curled around the rope
Reaching for your same tawny curls
That I would sweep out of your eyes,
As young adults, when you promised me that I was
The only girl you ever wanted to kiss
Now, long after the years of our summers,
Oh, how we both have grown,
Sitting opposite of you, as always,
Reminiscing the past and hoping
That you will always keep your promises
A contest entry
- Make Me Love You [show me your best] by thelovesongwriter.
800 points, ended July 29, 2007, 73 entries
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This poem certainly can turn back the pages of time in the book of life~ It really is quite refreshing ~ The imagery ~ is perfect for easily you can picture every syllable of everyword written...
The piece carries the reader so easily that anyone can relate regardless of which generation your in. ~ Ok, maybe not the current ~ I'm not sure with the Tecno age if kids really understand how great a tire swing can be ~
Excellent job ~ Thanks for entering the "Set the Bar" contest ~ good luck to you! -
I'm sorry to say, your poem has been eliminated from the contest. <3
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wow, i can see the whole peaceful and mesmerizing scenary..great write
good luck&thanks for entering
-lovesong -
such a sweet write, and such a lovely story. Really. I have memories like this from when I was younger. They really make one smile! Very well well written!
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Now, long after the years of our summers,
Oh, how we both have grown,
Sitting opposite of you, as always,
Reminiscing the past and hoping
That you will always keep your promises
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