I saw the moonlight kiss your face
And that was when I knew
That no-one ever looked to me
As beautiful as you
And when you breathed I caught the air,
Retained it in my soul
For one small part of your sweet love
Could make me pure and whole.
Cast your mind to distant days
Some place beneath the sky
As the rain ran down your cheek
I told you not to cry.
My fingers reaching out for you
To run through your wet hair
But when I saw those darkened eyes
They filled me with despair.
The secrets shut inside your heart
Still mysteries to me.
In vain I tried to let them out
But could not find the key.
If only you had trusted me
And compromised your pride
Instead you left me stranded
High upon the other side.
And now I walk upon your grave
My feet sink in the ground
For you are lost somewhere below
There never to be found.
I hear a whisper in my head
But your voice it is not
A wiser one who tells me go
And leave the dead to rot.
A contest entry
- Tell Me The Truth. Did You Ever Love Me? by forbidden-colour.
300 points, ended July 12, 2007, 19 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Unrequited love is like chasing your own tail... Better to give up the chase than actually catch it.... Your words shone with a golden tone! Congrats.
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wow. That's really beautiful. see, I love it when I can imagine the scenery in a poem... Great job! I definatley see why this was a winner.
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Cast your mind to distant days
Some place beneath the sky
As the rain ran down your cheek
I told you not to cry.
My fingers reaching out for you
To run through your wet hair
But when I saw those darkened eyes
They filled me with despair.
Aww!i love it! keep up the good work!
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Well the ending is supposed to involve the narrator finally laying to rest the object of their unrequited love so that they can move on with their life.
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Well Done
I am not entirely sure I like the way you ended this, but I must say I love the rhyme and the flow of this very very much. The ending just seems so out of sync with the rest of the poem.
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This was so beautiful.
If this is personal, I'm very sorry for your loss.
Love this so much, reminds me of a few things. Memories.
Well done!
Thank you for entering and the best of luck goes to you.x.
Lullaby.x.
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