Here's to life
and all it's rules
pay the price
just to get through
you fail when you try
and you can't chill
then you realize
life sucks always will
not enough money
not enough friends
not good enough looks
it all depends
on who you are
and what you do
cause love just lies
it's never true
people die
cause no one care
you don't wanna lose life
but you don't want it there
Still There
Author notes
gigolo crazyhat5432321 ok so this poem is what i really think of life you want it but you don't want it there
A contest entry
- Life Sucks (rounds contest) by SoftlyScreaming.
600 points, ended July 12, 2007, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Points in the write direction by zero7.
1500 points, ended January 15, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i like the concept, and the rhyming.. you really pulled this one off and i'll give you credit for that much.. and yes i agree, life is very complicated..
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wow, this is definatly a sign of your view on life and the moment. It's really depressing, and that is fine when your expressing your feelings at that time, it depends what you want from your poetry. The style of this piece is good, its not cluttered and it flows well, however it does start to repeat itself. and if you are looking to be published spelling is important unless your using it in the context of spoken language. this is good, but like i said, it all depends on what you want from your poetry, this type of poem has been seen and done, hundreds of times, decades ago, sadly it is not new and is unlikely to be published, but if your not interested in that, its a poem above the rest of the emotional stuff i see on here.
little suggestion, not good enough looks
try not enough good looks.
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what do you meen my self i can read it fine do you meen because of the back round you can't read it because purple and black have diffrent brightness factors?
what do you meen exactly?
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Do you mind changing the background? Can't read properly.
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