Heaven

As my mind wanders
I'm there with you face to face
So close I can smell you
I can feel your hands on me
every touch like silk
every kiss is like a breath of fresh air
One look in your eyes
and the world melts away
This hunger I have for you
like no other I've felt before
My body craves you

My heart needs you

My soul longs for you
I would crawl to the ends of the earth
for just one look
one touch
one kiss
one moment
in heaven with you

A contest entry

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Naridill
January 19, 2008

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Very repetitive but intriguing. I like the word usage but feel the over-used words bring it down some.
PastelMoons
July 13, 2007
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This is fabulous!! so much emotion, Wow
Very powerful!!
I love it!
~Pastel
Fire N Ice
July 11, 2007

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You read me like an open book
every word, every emotion... it's like reading my own dreams,

I would crawl to the ends of the earth
for just one look
one touch
one kiss
one moment
in heaven with you

I love you