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Fluttering Glow~ ( I. Sestina...II. Double Tanka )

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I. (Sestina)



Fluttering~


When I look at you, my eyes dance,
teardrops cascading like petals.
You say, perhaps it is the starlight,
but these emotions say it's love;
this constant fever, fluttering
like butterflies in my heart.

Dreaming of no other, this heart,
as I pass, flowers begin to dance
hips sway, eyelashes fluttering
stepping lightly upon falling petals.
Winds seem to whisper true love
sprinkling shimmer into the starlight.

Gazing at you in the starlight;
your affection encircling my heart
in a sanctuary of love.
Attuned with nature in dance
in a whirlpool of petals,
the sounds of sigh fluttering;

fireflies in colors, fluttering
in the magic of misty starlight
with the nectar of petals
filling the desire in this heart
even in darkness, daffodils dance
nourished by the power of love.

All of the Earth in need of love
every breath of life, fluttering
in this magical, celestial dance
we engage in, with the starlight,
raging in the heart
streaming from the petals.

We drink from the petals
this nurturing sip of love
feeding thirsty hearts
together fluttering
under the same starlight
in this survival dance.

Take my hand, dance through petals
In this starlight, making love
Feel the fluttering...you own my heart.

♥♥


~  ~ ~ ~


II. (Double Tanka)



Glow ~


Twilight skies send thoughts
whispering in gentle winds
from fluttering heart

catching a star to bring love
dancing upon your doorstep.

~

Two gentle spirits
crossing paths, wings intertwined
a flicker of fate

kissed by a Heavenly glow
to shine for eternity.


♥♥





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Author notes

poet2angels


poem #1

SESTINA

The Sestina, a French form, is an intricate form of six unrhymed stanzas of six lines each, followed by a Tercet (three lines.) This type of form works well for the poet who wants to examine a subject from different viewpoints. The Sestina depends on the repetition of end-words, but be aware that only the end word repeats, not as in other French forms where the entire line repeats.

Choose any 6 words, such as:

a) sunshine, poems, c) sister, d) silk, e) wood, f) flowers

The pattern:
Stanza 1: a, b, c, d, e, f. Stanza 2: f, a, e, b, d, c. Sanza 3: c, f, d, a, b, e. Stanza 4: e, c, b, f, a, d. Stanza 5: d, e, a, c, f, b. Stanza 6: b, d, f, e, c, a. Tercet : ab, cd, ef.



Poem #2

Double Tanka:

In English, the Tanka is usually written as five short lines.


Traditionally in Japanese, the tanka is five groups of sounds, each of 5 or 7 sound units. The first and third units have 5 sound units (as in a haiku), while the other units have 7 sound units. This can be represented by:

5-7-5-7-7

Double tanka: 5-7-5-7-7
5-7-5-7-7





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  • Christinam
    May 13, 2008
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    Love the imagery

  • Have left the site
    January 31, 2008

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    These look so complicated but are really well worth the time to read. And you have a golden trophy. Such beautiful poetry. - Wil


  • Jalalbad gold member
    December 16, 2007
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    pretty poem well worth the gold.


  • poetryality silver member
    September 18, 2007

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    I stand and applaud the artistic ability you display in writing these two complicated forms of poetry. Both ever so beautiful as individual poems, and breathtaking as a complimentary duo of acclamation. Oh... do I ever agree with the host of this challenge. There is no way this presentation could have garnered anything less than GOLD!

    Congratulations!


    Much LOVE & Respect ♥

    Renee


  • Gratitude
    August 15, 2007

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    Personally, I prefer the double tanka. It is crammed with effect, without being heavy. Well done with both, they are chock full of beautiful imagery. I also appreciate the notes you left on the poetic forms to help the rest of us out. Thanks!

  • Desert Knave
    July 13, 2007

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    Beautiful writing. I especially like the sestina, which just glows. Very nicely done. The tanka also appers to be spot on, and quite the poem of love and relationship. ~Jim


  • BittersweetPhantasm
    July 10, 2007

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    ... wow. these are both beautiful. i loved the first one and the second one was to the exact same standard. i can't say that either one was better written... they're both awesome.
    thank you.

    well done and good luck


  • Arkbear gold member
    July 10, 2007

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    Oh my Goodness ~

    I am Very familiar with both of these Forms....

    ....and I must say.....

     

     

    ....absolutely Lovely ~

     

    Presentation...Flawless ~

     

    Form criteria...Perfection ~

    Titles...very befitting ~

     

    Grammatical choices...Very well chosen ~

     

    Your D-Tanka is Superb!

     

    Your Sestina is overflowing with Magic!

     

    I don't know what to say...

    .....speechless ~

     

    It was a pleasure to start my day off

    with something of this magnitude and Beauty ~

     

    Please do NOT give up on Poetry of Form ~

     

    It suits you well ~

     

    Bear ~

    • poet2angels gold member
      July 10, 2007
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      ty Bro Bear....you made me smile and I respect your opinion so much...
      Lynda

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