smoldering moon
heralds fated hope
as aching eyes
emit wishes
astride oceans
of desire
declaring
ailing hearts flourish
beats still true,
though crumbled
a future framed
ever bonded
to you.
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A contest entry
- cry me a river by patsoldcat.
600 points, ended May 20, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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good write
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thanks
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such destructive behaviour, i love it!
... not that i want to experience it _yet_ again... -
have to admit, that another gold member, really knows how to compact pieces together. The smoldering phrase, "ailing hearts flourish beats still true, though crumbled a future framed ever bonded to you.", electrifies the taste buds from these views.
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I just wanted to add some applause for your really great poem xx
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thank you for your comment and applause glad you liked it x
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A Beautiful Poem !!
This is really beautiful. I've read it several times -
A beautiful poem! I really enjoyed reading it. Its so different from what I'm use to. Thank you for entering the contest!
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