I hear you are feeling sad and I am sure you are a lovely lad.
I don't know what your troubles are but you don't have to go that far.
Now your talking about taking your life and thats not very nice.
Why do you want to start this chain brining the ones who love you so much pain.
Your life is a precious gift from God and to take it is a sin.
Why don't you keep on fighting don't let the sorrow win.
Every day brings some thing new and you will miss what god has planed for you
For every tear you shed there is a happy time to come.
Don't act like a fool please don't be so dumb.
I don't even know you but please let me show you.
That this life is worth while you would know it if you ever lost a child.
The pain that you cause your family and your friends
let me tell you honey the heartache never ends
So please be brave and stay don't waste your life don't go away.
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A contest entry
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Simply Inspiring:
OMG. Excellent. You're right. To end your life is a sin. I appreciate you adding that in. This poem was sooo inspiring. Hey, it inspired me. Goodness. I feel happy now. Thank you so much for entering my little contest. Thanks for sharing your thoughts with us.
Love,
Evemauy
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the last line reminds me of "don't hide your love away" i'm not sure why, really but i had to say that, now onto what i thought of this, i loved it, it's very inspiring and full of hope, what a wonderful write, i'm sure that you can help someone with words like these, best of luck in the contest
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my favorite is the last 2 lines. you have some great inspirational ideas but i feel the flow is affected by your dedication to a rhyme scheme. you also have one or two spelling/grammar errors. look over it and edit it and i will read it again
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Thank you for your entry. Good job.
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and life is so damn interesting!! and that's what I said in my poem. I haven't been sure about God for years now but please just don't. You don't have the right, I basically believe that just like this poet here.
If you did do it, people would always remember you that way.
Don't do it. Please.
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Well said, too bad words are often not enough to plant a new seed of hope to replace the tree that died.
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This is a very great write, my favorite lines were:
Your life is a precious gift from God and to take it is a sin.
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For every tear you shed there is a happy time to come.
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lovely, live is worth fighting for, i was so low once and some one said that to me thanks i enjoyed this
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great write again
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Well, Amen Sister!
...all I can say...Peace, Rhonda
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I totally agree with what you have written here. Good rhyme and good write.
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good poem alert!! i like how it shows hope and faith in life.
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