I had a dream about a place that no one else has seen,
a place where only I have been, oh marvelous of dreams,
the ocean glowed a darkest blue as the sun rose from it's depths,
reflections sparkled upon the waves which took away my breath,
fish leaped from the water and flew but for a time,
then dived back in the endless sea as droplets fell like chimes,
oh how I wish this dream was there, oh that it could be true,
oh how I wish it could have been, not only me, but you.
Can you ever describe a place too beautiful to tell?
No matter what words you say they always seem to fail.
if only to capture a very brief flash of a gentle breeze,
as the light shines through the dark and the swaying of the trees,
with all my heart to show you, of the beauty I have seen,
but I can not share for words aren't there to describe what I have seen.
I know that the dream must end but for a while it is real,
the sun rises in an arc as the birds begin to trill,
everything seems to match a beat as the waves all crash on cue,
the plants they dance in a beautiful sway as a breeze just happens through,
the song is not of all the things that happen to be here,
but rather the things that are not seen but yet we know are there,
oh how I wish it would never end, that I was not alone,
so that perhaps I could share it with someone else who's known,
I try so hard to describe a place too beautiful to tell,
but all the words I try to use just simply seem to fail,
how can I describe the way, the sun lit up the sky,
the way that nothing stopped or faltered for one brief flash of time,
oh how I want to show you, the beauty I have seen,
but I can not share for words aren't there to describe what I have seen.
The water seems to swallow the sun, while the birds prepare for night,
the forming dew catches the reddish hue from the suns quickly fading light,
then all at once the bushes stir with a gentle soothing sound,
as fireflies begin to rise and lights flicker all around,
hundreds of thousands of fireflies frozen in the sky,
a glowing rain, but oh the pain, the beauty these words hide,
Oh how I wish you were there, so that you could have known,
the pain I felt as it got dark, and I sat there all alone.
I try so hard to describe a place too beautiful to tell,
but all the words I try to use just simply seem to fail,
how can I describe the way wind brushes through the trees?
or the way the fireflies danced upon the breeze?
Oh how I want to show you, the beauty I have seen,
But I can not share for words aren't there to describe what I have seen.
I feel the dream begin to end but yet I still crave more,
the moon starts to rise as the sunlight dies and shines upon the shore,
the stars emerge and twinkle high, and show off heavens might,
but all this beauty is wasted, for you aren't here this night,
for with all the beauty this dream has how beautiful can it be?
knowing that you aren't here tonight to share this all with me.
I desperately want to show you, the beauty I have seen,
but the words are wrong, the chance is gone, lost upon a dream.
I've tried so hard to describe a place, too beautiful to tell,
and I know, that all the words, I've used have surely failed,
no matter what God has made, what beauty he does share,
all of it is wasted, because you just weren't there,
oh how I wish this dream was there, oh that it could be true,
oh how I wish it could have been, not only me, but you.
Author notes
Haiku Killer, Age 20, option 2, and Nickelback- If Everyone Cared
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WOW
I LOVE YOUR USE OF IMAGERY!!!ITS A LITTLE SAD BUT HAS BEAUTIFUL DETAILS ABOUT THE DREAM!! POWERFUL WRITE!! MUCH LOVE!!
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the imagery is wonderful...
this is truly unique...
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Beautiful Imagery
The imagery expressed is very impressive. The message was trite but presented in a different light..in other words "original"... great write...
Kay Laon Anders
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Now this is really a fantastic poem. Full of well described images. I like the last verse where you invite the reader into your dream. -
I liked this part best:
I try so hard to describe a place too beautiful to tell,
but all the words I try to use just simply seem to fail,
how can I describe the way, the sun lit up the sky,
the way that nothing stopped or faltered for one brief flash of time
But, you didnt put what I asked for in the author box, please do so. This rhymed, which is a downside for me. I just feel like you could have said a lot more without the rhyming. Overall, this was a very nice poem with some good ideas and nicely placed words and thoughts. The concept of this was good, I just think it could have gone a more deep and thought provoking way. Thanks for entering, KP -
This was quite lovely and powerful, sad but beautiful details of a dream. I can relate to it well. It is quite upsetting and disappointing to awake from a flawless dream just to realize it was only a dream and not reality. This was very well written.
Thank you for entering. Best of luck in my contest.
- Andi
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This was a very beautiful poem. I loved the descriptions you gave and the way you rhyme. Great job!
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I loved it! It's beautiful! It flowed so well. Even though you said you can't describe your dream, I saw it perfectly.
Best of luck in the contest.
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for me, reading your thoughts is like that of an unveiling of magic!
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Beautiful write, thanks for entering.
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Excellent!!! It is very vivid and very powerful- I loved it!
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