depression, insomnia
bipolar schizophrenia
crooked limbs and
crooked teeth
it all drips down when i want to sleep
all drips down to my flat feet
Please tell me what you think
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and now i want green eggs and ham
actually this had a very gritty ugh feel to it...
in times of stress and horrid moments, i resort to childlike poems and thoughts.
reminds me of that
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Wow, a very wonderfully flowing piece for its length. I like the "almost rhyming" scheme a lot more than i do a full rhyme scheme, it works wonderfully with this piece giving it the undertones of a disallusioned organization. exceptional use of medical terminology in here also, which is not all that commonplace as of late. Very well written short piece, Keep it up.
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simple but says alot. im with flaed on the second line.... peace!
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thats funny.
i like the second line, bipolar schitzophrenia. that must be what i have....hm...-goes off into thought-
well i like it.
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Its short but it hits hard. It had an excellent flow and definately is unique.
Im always jealous of those who capture so much in so few lines, well done.
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It seems electric, for some reason. A night lights piece, in contrast to my newest early morning write. Refreshingly different, and succinct.
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