The wings flutter faintly for a moment
A split second
Thoughts ring on and on
Like the chimes on a tambourine
Dangling inside a noose
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I have been slipped between avenues of fog
Taciturn lights droop
Soon to be absorbed by slices of obscurity
A cavity that hums as a phantom
Flightless,
But moving as a ripple
Rolling over fissured brain waves
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There is a serenity without calm
Feet upon the branch
And with no second thinking,
I glide from the plank
Inches above the ground
Surrounded by the gray sides of morning
Author notes
suggestions for a new title anyone?
the last stanza can be taken as the actually act of suicide or fully plunging into the thoughts of suicide... it all depends on how you interpet it.
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A contest entry
- oh, to just disappear... by CarCrashHumor.
1500 points, ended August 15, 2007, 48 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wowowowoww! I'm SO excited about this piece!!
you have no idea.
you're a goddess.
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I glide from the plank
Inches above the ground
Surrounded by the gray sides of morning
Amazing words
So amazing I don't want to face the meaning
The title really works, I would change it, it works well with the whoile thing
You got the picture over perfectly
And made so much ot of this piece
It was so differetn from any kind of this poem I've ever read
It was beautiful
You the lostness and the wandering through heavy fog images really well
You connected so well with emotions and metaphors
Well done
I love this
I love you
♥
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This is beautiful!
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thank you darling
♥
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wow, this is beautifully penned, your words never cease to captivate me! well done! and good luck to you!
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your writing is so clean...
it sparkles.
whoosh~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
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lol that was an awesome comment.
thank you!
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