My anger and rage,
Cannot be held in any longer
You make me so that I should hate every living soul,
Not like I didn't already
The rage clouds my eyes a little more everyday
Soon,
It will cover my eyes,
Forever blinding me
My friends,
They will "worry" about me,
But we all kno how they feel,
{Only adding up to the anger}
You are the sorce of all my rage,
Always feeding the fire that burns within,
But you must be careful,
The fire bites
My rage suddenly roars from within,
Making me blind for ten minutes,
But hun,
Ten minutes is long enough to kill someone
The rage in me finally subsides,
Well,
The major part has,
Now that I see you lying there on the ground
The look of fear will stay with you forever
This is the way,
I say,
That I finally got rid of a bit of my rage.....
Author notes
so... ummm what do u think?
A contest entry
- 3 Part Contest: Part 1- Rage [[BIG POINTS]] by GiftedPsychosis.
1500 points, ended August 7, 2007, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I think that this is a fine poem. Fine as in good. :]
There are a few spelling errors, well, typing errors.
Over all though, great job and good luck in the contest! -
powerful!
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"The rage clouds my eyes a little more everyday"
--That single line is my favorite in the whole poem. It's awesome and oozes with imagery.
"My rage suddenly roars from within,
Making me blind for ten minutes,
But hun,
Ten minutes is long enough to kill someone"
--haha isn't that the truth?
Great job with this, I really like it.
good luck in the contest =]
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I have had problems with black outs from being so enraged several times before.. I wont go into detail about it but I will say this much.. there is much truth behind your words. I can feel your anger burning as if it were my oen. Well done!
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