It need not glisten...
I want to go to Paris
To listen
French words are as tingling as...
the effervesce of blue roses
All days there my ears will dance
to every tone along the street
from every frog I hap to meet
I crave the way a music flows
from holes beneath those turned up noses
Fuck their wine - fuck their food
and fuck their fucking attitude
I just want to go to Paris
any time
not to dine
but listen
Author notes
This my tribute to the World's most (in my opinion) beautifully spoken language
A contest entry
- Take Us Away!! by Cynthia Gaines.
1300 points, ended September 2, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
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800 points, ended May 31, 11 entries
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Very good
Thank you for entering my contest and using the prompt and also for putting it in you AN. A good smooth write
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The traveller seems alienated from the French, people and culture, despite an avowed wish to go to Paris! Maybe I'm stretching it a bit but I'm going to let this piece stay in the contest so don't feel that, by saying that, I am asking you to remove it!
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Ha! This is a cute poem
I like the obscenities, lol. Thanks for entering my contest, keep up the good work.
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Thank You for Your Entry ~
Congratulations on the trophies this has won
Be aware you need to have this label 'Adult' due to the 'f' word in this
This write is absolutely beautiful, even with the f word thrown in I personally adore the french language and would love to learn it one day, everytime they speak it sounds beautiful ... even though they could be abusing you it'd still sound gorgeous 
"French words are as tingling as...
the effervesce of blue roses" - breath taking lines
Best of Luck
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
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Magnificent!!!!!!!!! I really feel this way myself. Paris is one place I do want to visit before I die and I'm going to do just that!!!!!! thank you for sharing this with me!!!!!!!!!!
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Wooooow, I absolutely love this write.
Your rhyme is upbeat and fantastic, with flawless flow.
I love the concept of liking France for that very different reason. You don't want all the wine and romance and food, you want to listen to their soft, slurry voices. Beautiful, I agree.
This is a nice alternative look at culture, not what I'd expected, but in the best of possible ways. It fits the contest well, and made me smile.
"Fuck their wine - fuck their food
and fuck their fucking attitude"
This is what I call tasteful cursing. Nicely executed!
"from every frog I hap to meet"
I giggled. Absolutely fantastic, really.
Wonderful piece, thank you very much for sharing!
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I wanna go to Paris someday too
Great Write and
Thank You for entering
Good Luck
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Three cheers!
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I like the idea of the singular form of music, 'a' vs 'the'. Especially when mixed with the plural 'tunes'. I don't know if it is grammatically correct, but who cares. It gave me something to think about. I also understand the 'listen' idea thanks to you note .
There's a certain kind of pureness to this piece. I really feel a 'letting go' in the 3rd last stanza - fuck it wine, their food, their attitude... bravo!
Best wishes in the contest.
Sincerely -Emmjay -
I'm sorry, but my contest is for poems in france.
not about france
please remove your entry, or I'll remove it for you.
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The second paragraph is my favorite. Great choice of words! Very nice write! Thanks for entering!
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Thanks for this.
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ha
all at once in love and hating the french. I love the juxtaposition. very nice.
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I guess everyone loves to go to Paris which counts me in.
haven't been there
but would dream to be there
it would be joie de vivre
but somehow reading your write made feel the Parisian Culture
I guess right now the only way I could go there is have David Rice as a bf (from the movie Jumper) to take me there. whoa I'm being tongue-in-cheek lol
Enjoyed this write Sir
and oh it was from Tifanny's contest
I guess she also loves Paris
well I guess her name got a hint of Holy Golighty
Anna Lee
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The French language is pretty. I tried learning it last year, and the only thing I care about remembering is "Viva le fromage!" - that's something about cheese. Ha. Anyway...I like your descriptions of the French awesomeness, for it made me want to travel to Paris with you. Good job.
(A side note: I looked up "blue roses" to see if they were real. It's a pity they aren't; they're so pretty.) -
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After thirteen years of joint research by an Australian company Florigene, and Japanese company Suntory, a blue rose was created in 2004 using genetic engineering.
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Oh, I think that's marvellous - I can relate to the dry tone, and to the swearing very much.
I actually can thoroughly understand the ideas behind this. Great use of rhyme and repetition too
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Wow!! I do like this poem , but next time you enter a contest please read all the rules that are stated. (rule #1; forth stanza) Paris is a beautiful place to visit. The Eifle Tower is of my favorite feats of human engineering. The language is also very elloquent, being pleasant to the ear. Thank you for entering though. Good luck with the next contest.
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this is cool,i like it.especially the second stanza.good write.
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This is most unpleasant.
"Fuck their wine - fuck their food
and fuck their fucking attitude"
And you wonder why the French people say, "vas te faire foutre chez les Grecs" under their breath to yanks as they pocket the 20% tip the yank idiots leave, not realising service est compris?
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cool thanx 4 the entry abe
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I'd love to go to Paris ...
but I have a lot more respect for their food than you obviously do.
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I've been to Paris myself and Angres (can't spell it). Beautiful country, mostly beautiful people. Do love the wine though. Gives you a smile.
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This made me smile. Thank you.
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well you made your point clear.
success in the contest
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hehe. i can comepletely relate! Great rhymes
Thnkyou for entering and good luck in my contest.
Katie -
Interesting song & I think, relevant content. The flow is regular & the rhyme. Overall, I enjoyed this, though it falls into the category of a song I have heard before.
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Thanks...
Thank you for entering our contest and best of luck to you!!!
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well Paris is a beautiful city--French, I'm horrible at (even after living there for 5 yrs during my childhood)....
good work
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I want to go to paris..which is why im taking french >_<. This had some great parts and a part i didnt like so much.
Fuck their wine - fuck their food
and fuck their fucking attitude
- this was not needed to me...it added humor yes but it also screwed up your poem...and then the last line, im not sure if you wanted it to be like your first line...
Not saying this isnt a good piece i just got a little confused towards the end
Thanks for entering
<3Dani -
This is a really good poem.. i like it.. sorry its taking so long.. lots of stuff goin on as the break is comeing to an end.. lol.. thanks for joining and good luck in the contest..
Laters
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While the words are new and inspiring the idea of Paris being a Muse is a complete cliche. I heard it when I was young and will hear it again I'm sure. Poetically it's a decent piece, Muse worthy? I don't know. Thank you for entering.
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What can I say but beautiful? Playful and longing.
Nicely written.
~MotherMachineGunn~ -
Tumbleweed
Not many comments here! Me thinks this is not any way close to being controversial, even if you did say the F word.
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