Old age gently tugs a fleeting cord
a golden thread of dreams left unspun,
transported on timeless wings of thought
time and distance that we can’t outrun.
Puerile limbs dangled in the water
ripples spread in undulating drifts,
endless laughter as the minnows dart
scattering in murky depths short shrift.
Barefoot days of sticklebacks and string
heedless of the supine corks soft motion,
bent pin hooks that flaunt a tasty worm
fishing tales were just a childish notion.
Vesper light transforms the fading day
sepia waters soft as velvet sheen,
memories that bring to life once more
balmy yesterdays and childhood dreams
Golden days that set my heart a quiver
innocence I left there on the river
A contest entry
- Picture Inspired by Cannonsfire.
4500 points, ended July 20, 2007, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hornswaggle's Gold by Acidanthra.
400 points, ended October 2, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Memories of the younger days are the golden twine that through age binds the heart
For within this binding one can dream as they venture on their last journey home
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Thanks for writing this!
Just a perfect work of poetry! I liked the imagery shared in this. The picture matches the words coming from your pen. Nice job! -
Thanks friend for the journey back through time. The imagery allowed me a clear picture and remember those golden times even if it was just for a moment. I thank you for sharing this poem with me and god bless in your challenge...
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Oh lady, You really need to offer this for the next book project. The 4th stanza is beautiful, "Versper ligh"t and "sepia waters" the description of light on the water I can see the silvery shimmer. I enjoyed every stanza and entire write.
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Captured from the first stanza, you drew me deep into the scene. Your flow and word choice is such that I was reading without effort as you took my mind on a vacation. Well done!
Love,
Amera ♥
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I think I did stipulate free verse but...this flows and rhymes so very well, it may not win because it was a rule to write free verse but I like it so much that I am reconsidering how strict I will be
Love, C
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Wow, that first stanza, left me speechless, for at least a few minutes, then I read the rest and was even more impressed, "transported on timeless wings of thought" brilliant line, and the memories portrayed was so vivid you could almost plant yourself there, well done, good luck in the contest! - Jacen an IndividualEleven.
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Great journey back to childhood days of innocent surroundings and nothing to worry about except perhaps a sunburn. Wonderful penning...very smooth.
Becky
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Beautiful
I looked at this contest and didn't get around to entering. However your poem is really great. I love the feel of it and the style you wrote it in. It is clever and well thought out. An excellent all round piece. Well Done and best of luck in the contest.
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i dont like fishing ... but
this made me feel like i should fish and that fishing is a cure for all ailment
well done
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