Slender throats
encased in creamy white,
remained open tombs,
where cold embers,
rise like bile
from shallow graves
of adolesence past;
Double edged tongues,
through gleaming ivory
slither,
poke me all in fun,
cruelty and laughter
never dulled,
at a hundred sixty pounds
they pick my scabs
until pain
bleeds through again;
How do I fight
what I cannot see,
through cartons
of Marlboros,
smoke rises from my throat?
I'll wash them down again
with a thousand Tabs;
I can still taste
after all these years.
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- Clean Ugly by Danna Hobart.
300 points, ended July 21, 2007, 9 entries
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Marvelous! I think almost everyone can relate to this in some way, because I have grown to understand that even the bullies had their bullies. It makes me think of what my oldest son is going through in school. He has never had an easy time making friends for some reason. He's always been an easy target for bullies. He's starting high school this year- military school. I sure hope he does not take up smoking. Hard to imagine the toughest times could still be ahead of us. Thank you for entering this.
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Sad for children are never taught and they do become adults
If not through the children so many others do feel the pain of ignorance . Untaught children taunt others as though it were a game and most of the time not an elder will pay atention until that person snaps and then on the news they appear surprised . I saw it in my school back in 1959 through 1971 . If they wont let correction in the homes then they definatly need it in our schools for children have to be taught respect for the pain to stop
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very good
i kije the way you personalized it with the ol' marlboro
brings back a lot
it's a very powerful message you versed
evewn tough it's the past
the memory is still there,
strong, defiant, etc
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this espress sorrows and sadness but i appreciate the write!!
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Really sad, but very well written.I enjoyed it...
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