I love you not
You love me less
Or so I thought
until you bought me this dress.
Could I have been wrong?
Is there something there?
I am so confused
I just want to swear.
I have a wall around my heart.
Few have managed to get in.
Yet each word is like a spark,
burning its way in.
I'm nervous now,
like I have never been.
You have captured my heart,
surprising as it is.
I pray you hold it dear.
I pray that it won't break.
I don't know what to do.
I don't know what to say.
What is that there?
What are you doing?
Are you proposing to me?
Are you sure of what you're doing?
I say yes with all my heart.
I cry tears of happiness.
Whatever comes our way,
We'll survive through it.
I loved you not,
and thought you loved me less.
Or so I had thought,
until you bought me that beautiful dress.
Author notes
It is simple yet sweet. It is another one of my bored moments. my baby cousin asked me to tell him a poem about love. This is what came to mind, so I hope you enjoy!!
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- It's Almost Like Being in Love by willowprincess.
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i love this. especially the repetetive lines at the beginning and end. i completely understand the emotions portrayed in this poem. great job.
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this was a good poem.... but you just kind of stopped rhyming... the rhymes may have been accidental at the start, but i'd suggest trying to fix it...
its weird how things turn out sometimes.... good job keep it up
~Nick
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awww!!!!
this poem is so sweet!!!
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Wow, I just smiled the whole time! "I loved you not, you loved me less" you've got a great rhyme pattern here, I'm jealous. That's one thing I have never managed to do is rhyme. keep it up, this is brilliant!
~Anne
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It is really sweet. The third stanza was by far your best i think its where you really started to connect with the words you were writing. I think the change between not loving someone and then loving them was a bit rushed, I think you could've eased into it a bit more as it seems like to separate poems squished together. As a whole its a but weak but if you split it into the first four stanzas and then the rest then its really really very good. Consider an extra stanza to make it link a bit more? Really well written though!!
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