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Last Year's ///// Wishes\\\\\\\\
                          Are This Year's ^Apologies^

I Can't remember Why
The Truth Feels Like A Lie
Because
My Heart Is The Posession

of a once Precious Princess

&&
My Defenses Hit The Ground,
And They Shattered
>>>>>>>>Leaving me>>>>>>>
So Open And                            Exposed
In The Face Of .Change.
That's When He Turned To Me And Said...
Once Upon A Time
Before their were Regrets
You told me
Don't Look < Because there is beauty breaking
Beauty In The Making

{If Home Is Where The Heart Is, My Home Is Where You Are}

Grey Sky Eyes
Called for
Rainyday Melodies
And lyrical
Bedtime Lies
with The Girl Behind The Clouds
Blowing in the wind

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  • Marctheman
    August 31, 2007
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    great piece love it


  • TrixieOne
    August 29, 2007

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    Oooh I love this...
    "I can't remember why the truth feels like a lie", "my defenses hit the ground and they shattered", and especially "Before their were Regrets/ You told me/
    Don't Look < Because there is beauty breaking
    Beauty In The Making"
    Love it. Been there...too many times


  • Xxthe angry gothxX
    July 10, 2007

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    this was pretty good and good luck with the contest. i really liked the last stanza. one suggestion, in the title, maybe it should be intentions[?] good luck


  • PaintedParisPassion
    July 10, 2007

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    this was good, but you didnt follow the rules, please change this or i'll have to DQ this. The punctuation was a bit much, but other than that it was an ok write.


  • GimmeSomeGasoline
    July 9, 2007
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    nice work, i liked the way you used the word bank in the poem. very creative. thanx for entering

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