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Yesterdays Tears

Yesterdays tears
flood hopes of tomorrow

waters rage into
deep abyss

oxygen deprived nights
drown sanity's future

struggling fish
deprived of water

flop, flop. 

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  • Desire gold member
    July 9, 2007

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    Oy!

    Congratulations on Your Trophy win
    Wonderful images You have brought forth and
    just the thought of struggling fish
    Oy!
    I gasp for air

    Many blessings to You
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Cupcrazy gold member
    July 9, 2007
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    Wonderful metaphor and great imagery, excellent take on the prompt. Hugs, Bunny

  • Cupcrazy gold member
    July 9, 2007
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    Your Prompt is : "Drowning in Yesterdays"