It's not what it seems
Yes, this earth spins around
And the moon, it still glows
As it's light hits the ground
I am fully aware
And fully alive
I wrote this for you
And learned how to survive
This world is just dreams
And they've all come true
Goodbye to my secret,
So sorry and blue
It's not even there
But if you'd like to know
Read my first lines
And this secret will show
Author notes
July 9, 2007... To explain this poem, I am often in my own world... Nothing is real, but it's real to me. That's what this poem is about... You read it at first and it seems like every thing's perfect...
But then the end tells you to read the first line of each stanza and if you do that it says:
It's not what it seems
I am fully aware
This world is just dreams
It's not even there
[7]-Write me your secret like a postsecret.com type of thing you get kudos if you have a link to a picture or a hand made secret-but if not just write a poem about it or just give me the secret plain and simple
Cure My Tragedy
A contest entry
- No Brainer by Wind Walker.
375 points, ended August 4, 2007, 8 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Post Secret by WaterDamaged Love.
300 points, ended September 10, 2007, 22 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is pretty good. I like it a lot. keep up your great work. and congradulations on your honorable mentions!!!
Crimson -
Different and secretive. I like it.
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THANK YOU FOR ENTERING
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THANK YOU FOR ENTERING
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THANK YOU FOR ENTERING
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THANK YOU FOR ENTERING
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You've got a secret -
but it's easy on the eyes and the heart
Good luck in the contest
B D
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hey that's neat
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very creative♥ i like this, to be honest id love to live i another reality, because the common one causes way to much pain.. x]
thanx for entering & good luck!
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I like how you made us go back to the beginning to know your secret -- I even passed the first stanza by and couldn't figure out what you were talking about until the end. Great work.
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Wow, how creative and unique. Great poem over all and that hidden message is so cool! I actually thought it was kind of eerie. Awesome job!
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Very interesting
I liked it and The message was confusing untill you pointed it out. A great rhymeing peice. Good luck
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Wow. This is totaly awsome I agree, I'm much like that alone in my own world. It's a great poem I love it you should enter my contest, you'd definetly score finalist. anyways, great poe,!
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This is a cool poem. I would never of known what the heck you were talking about until I read your author's note. Enjoyed the read!!!
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wow that's cool i have never seen a poem thign like that ^_^
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i love what you did with the first line of each stanza, sending two different messages in one poem, i love it. very nicely written
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I love you.
I don't even know where to start on commenting this.... You know how people always go "oh I can totally relate!" yeah well for me, this is something that I'd write... if I had the balls. I love that the first lines all rhyme, that's amazing craftmenship (don't know if that's a word) and the piece flows so well but it's those last lines... Living in a world that is just dreams, especially when it's not just 'oh the clouds are made of marshmallows and love makes the world go round'...
Sorry if this seems like a mess but this poem is me. It's everything I am, it's everything I have been. It's the lie I'm living... it's the lie I'm stuck with.
Bandaid.
. Rewarded 8
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No explanation needed
I loved it!, Short and sweet. "I am fully aware
And fully alive
I wrote this for you
And learned how to survive
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Favorite part !!. I have read it like 6 times now!.
I love the hidden message (thats not that hidden now
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i loved this poem sweetie
it is very nice, i read it like 3 times
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so very good. It compells the reader in the last lines to go back to the beginning and read it again. A truly masterful peice of artwork, i love it! My hats off, and my shades thrown aside. I kneel and ask what I may do for you.
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Great!
So clever and imaginative....I enjoyed this very much! Great Job
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I love this poem and I live mostly in my own world too...there's a lot of interesting people and places there...when ever I have to do something that bores me I can invite a few freinds from my world and boredom because the funnest thing ever.
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Awesome write, I liked the way the last stanza went together...Great job and good luck
**Master Ktulu** -
Joshua
Sup, very insiteful.
you shud always live in your own world free from un wanted reality keep it up
josh
. Rewarded 4
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The Earth still spins on its axis and the moonglow still hits the ground but yet reality is still doubted and the image of it all being a dream is powerful. I have often wondered if it is indeed all a dream, maybe the dream of some giant whose lifespan is infinitely longer than our own - and when he wakes, the dream and the Earth are banished into thin air. I enjoyed reading this challenging poem but wondered who the "you" was that it was written for ? camus
. Rewarded 8
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This poem makes the reader think, and you've done an amazing job with it. It shows a sense of awareness of your surroundings. Great job!
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Holy crap! This was amazing. I loved that hidden riddle in there. Very creative. This was an amazing poem all together. Good rhyme and structure. Good luck!!!
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Oh my! That's so clever! xD
I like it! - At first I didn't really get it - but then I read the AN and I understood.
It's really good, and I really like it.
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