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earthstar's place

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Welcome to my magic,
my poetry is real.
a place that defies logic,
and words can also heal.

my poetry is real,
take the hand of earthstar.
with a mystical feel,
our voyage will go far.

a place that defies logic,
where babies speak in rhyme.
musings are prolific
and fairies tell the time.

and words can also heal
in earthstar’s magic place.
all this I will reveal
as you explore my space.

 

 

 

 

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Retourne:
Like so many other French forms, the retourne is all about repetition. It contains four quatrains (four-line stanzas), and each line has eight syllables. The trick is that the first stanza's second line must also be the second stanza's first line, the first stanza's third line is the third stanza's first, and the first stanza's fourth line is the fourth stanza's first. Retournes do not have to rhyme.
Form source: shadowpoetry.com

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  • Swan song gold member
    July 14, 2007
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    Well that is cool and very cute I like it


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    July 10, 2007

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    I like your poem and ideas for earthstar a lot. As a silver member, she can use the border and poem for sure.
    She could also have a sign worked into the border.
    Your retourne is admirable; an interesting form.


  • Swan song gold member
    July 10, 2007
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    Very nice. Another retourne that rhymes excellent imagination lovely all the way through.


  • PerVirtuous
    July 10, 2007
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    Sweetness! Captivating. I love it. It is exactly what a poem is suppised to be.


  • ellipsist
    July 9, 2007

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    beautiful... you've portrayed

    a very peaceful, magical and inviting...

    how could anyone not be intrigued and want to visit?


  • PoetsAngel
    July 9, 2007

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    OMG!! can I come too? Even if it's for a little while sounds like the most beautiful place, one where dreams would really come true. Just brilliant beauty as you always do U

    Cathy
    xxxxx


  • RedAquarius
    July 9, 2007

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    "and words can also heal" - love that line. You rock (as I think I've said)!


  • HaleyMary
    July 9, 2007

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    Beautiful write. This piece had a magical feel to it. Cool info about the retourne form. Best of luck in the contest.


  • earthstar
    July 9, 2007

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    wow I would not thought of this ideas in a million years. I love the moon and star. King Arther and Merlin is one of my favorite stories. Wow I love what you wrote. I wish my writing was what you wrote about. I just did not think of it the way you put. I am very honor by all of your hard work. I really like. I wish I could do what others do. This is great thank you for all of your hard work. This is excellent.


  • And Hyetal
    July 9, 2007

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    I want to visit that palace! Sounds really neat! I hope she likes your idea! Good luck!

    Always,
    Cassie


  • Kappa Pyua
    July 9, 2007

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    wow

    Sounded good, but like always to complicated for me. Not the poem liked ther poem. But ur defanition of what it was confused me, made my head hurt.

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