pictures....
too many
everywhere you look
skimming them
putting them
in just the right
place
theres so many
you can lose them
without a trace
pictures of
mom, dad
sisters, and brothers
friends, birthdays,
and all the others
parties, houses
funny faces,
ballons, hats,
and all the spaces
it's funny always
when you look back
see all the memories
not always in tact
A contest entry
- For Poets With Less Than 10 Trophys by Mercury Rising.
600 points, ended July 9, 2007, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Nice
Be careful with your type-o's - siters instead of sisters, its instead of it's, partys instead of parties. This makes it seem like you don't really look over your work let alone revise and edit. The best poesms are carefully crafted over time. Try not to be so hastey, enjoy the process and play with your words. Overall, a very nice piece -
I really liked the short line breaks in this poem that was delightful to read. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering.
David
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