There's something funny
In the woods tonight
Stalking behind your senses
There's something humorous
In its' eyes
As it's twisting your tenses
There's something bad
In these woods tonight
Prowling in the gutter
Sniffing, turning
Catches an eye
[Not yours] Another
There's something... attractive
In this wood tonight
Whispering in your ear
Such pretty words
In rhyme and verse
It's all you want to hear
There's something deadly
In a wood tonight
Baring fangs you can't believe
Those, sharpened teeth
Moon reflected eye
You refuse to see
There's something else
In the woods tonight
It knows not what to do
Prowl, skulk, hides, sulk
There's something reflected
In the woods tonight
You look
And it's you
Author notes
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I was gonna do one of the others, but a flash of inspiration gave me this a few moments ago
I'm a little teapot, short and green with Glow in the dark nail polish. Oh, and Candy likes to lick humans
P.S. I absolutely love the way you did your hair today, I can only imagine how lucky he felt to have the opportunity to ask you. Scrap that last bit. He needs his hands and feet castrating *sucksucksucks up*
A contest entry
- Tutankhamen (LOTS OF OPTIONS!!! SOMETHING FOR EVERYONE!!!) by Salig.
930 points, ended September 15, 2007, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I WANT ANYTHING! by Umi Juvariel.
4300 points, ended April 9, 2009, 347 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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The only negative thing I have to say here is that the last line in the first stanza's last word seemed forced. It just didn't feel like it really fit into that sentence. Other than that, I enjoyed this poem. You flow and rhythm were good. There were nice metaphors and definitely nicely chosen words. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.
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Wow. I can see why you won silver with this! I love how it ends. Awah, who'm I kidding? I love the whole thing! Fantastic job!
~Fear
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thank you most muchly! <3
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*pokes* heey chris not spoke in a while.
really good poem. i like it I liked the repition of "Theres something ... in the woods tonight" at hte begining of th stanzas. well done . keep it up
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Okies, I love this...I really do...however, I'm a total control freak who like rules. So this is your warning. Go. Read the rules. Pray I don't decide to be mean and kick you out just for the fun of it.
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well... I did read them... but I felt a little silly putting that in!
*HUGGG*
*sucks up some more*
Did I forget to mention just how pretty you look, and so radiant too o= -
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Well, I guess you should have counted on my control-freakiness...anywho, now that I can deem this worthy of my attention...Very cool, very creepy, very *key word* INERESTING! yay! boredom is fading already...anywho, by the looks of it the competition is tough, so I wish you the best of luck!
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lol xPPPP .>
Ooh! I have an AP family now! Want to apply for a post? -
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depends...what's open?
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Look in my profile! Actually, everything's open. All I have is an AP daughter!
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nice job! I loved how you said "There's something ____ in the woods tonight" at the beginning of every stanza.
I liked, also, how in the ending you said "It's me" and so I read the words over again and saw that they are words you describe yourself as
I am sure you will do well in the contest, good luck!!
~Daughter~
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Thankyoou!
I was thinking of it like being stalked by a monster, and then being bitten, then realising none of it happened because the monster was the protagonist all along
~Father~
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This is an interesting poem. From what I can make of it, you describe each individual hidden personality of a person, like the dark side, the fun side etc and then sum it up as the actual person, confused and not knowing what to do, like an inner struggle.
I like it, it works pretty well. Good Write.
SaintJimmy
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