When people say “I love you”, is it true ?
What kind of love resides within a soul,
when hatred soon appears to play its role ?
Love-hatred is a quite explosive brew …
The flowers of the seeds that once we grew,
through anger’s flame have turned into black coal.
The vapour of regret does not console,
nor build the ruins of our love anew.
Yet there’s a secret salve to soothe such pain :
the balm of unconditioned love and peace,
which knows no hatred, sorrow, fear or wrath,
forever free from envy’s mortal chain.
In Union, thoughts of separation cease -
when two are one, they walk a single path …
Author notes
a petrarchan sonnet in iambic pentameter and an abbaabba cdecde rhyme scheme
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I wrote this sonnet in eight different versions :
I. PETRARCHAN SONNET
II. FRENCH SONNET
III. ENGLISH SONNET
IV. SICILIAN SONNET
V. ITALIAN SONNET
VI. SPENSERIAN SONNET
VII. KEATS SONNET
VIII. KYRIELLE SONNET
"One Sonnet - Many Forms (Eight Versions)"
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3189850
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Not being fully aquainted with the true art of sonnets, I find this to be an easily read and understood piece. The emotion of love bound with the wisdom shown is very well portrayed. The flow and rythme blends to a well layed out write. being the first one read as I promised, I can see I am in for an inspiring time. Thank you for allowing me the read.
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This was beautiful, almost slightly falling into the cliche side, with me. Other than that you did a stellar job. Good luck.
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Ahhhh
Sweet love in roses and sonnets. There is nothing finer than that. A wonderful sonnet. Truly a beautiful piece that rolls off the tongue when read aloud.
I am such a fan of sonnets thanks to you Marion. This is so beautiful. Best of luck in these contests. ~Pamela
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This is a lovely sonnet! So true! Good Luck, Betsy
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A beautiful sonnet, full of truth and wisdom. This is certain to move you forward in the competition! Congrats on a job well done and best of luck to you. (Though I too don't believe you need "luck"
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Much love,
~J.
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The rhyme and flow are so beautiful. I am always in awe as you master every form you try There is so much wisdom in the words too. I love the last line...
love
ellie x
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Rightly placed. Very nice.
True love is fearless and never wants anything in return. When these characters are present then we know it is actual love. All other expressions as seen in this world as so called love are full of self interest and does not stand tough tests of life. You have brought out the concept well. Well done my sister.
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This is really excellent with a positive and lovely message. A beautiful sonnet. You are so talented at these.
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A well written Italian sonnet, very gentle in mood yet relaying great wisdom. Excellent choice of rhymes too. Thanks for sharing and good luck sister mine! (you don't need it either
) Laura x 
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who doesn't need luck ?
thank you so much for your precious review and encouraging words and applause, sister laura ... I made a little mistake calling my sonnet italian, while it actually is petrarchan (beginner's ignorance
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eager to read your masterpiece ...
many congrats again to your trophy-win in survivor's !!!
marion
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I love the volta's second look! that is a perfect solution to the pain of love/hate. You make it clear and plain, that when we join our lives and aims, the way is lovely. I think the syntax of line 8 is askew - what about "nor build the rotten ruins of war anew".
Excellent sonnet - you are mastering the form quickly.
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thank you so much, dear margaret, you are so precious to me ... indeed, this line sounded awkward, I have changed it according to your valuable suggestions ...
marion
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A Lovely sonnet, so beautifully worded, I love the turn between stanzas. Well done!
xxoo
dk
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thank you, diana, as long as I can play with iambic pentameter, I'm in paradise ... like a little kid
maa
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Exceptional!!
This sonnet is sheer perfection and is really a masterpiece. This is by far the best poem I have read in quite some time. Thanks so very much for sharing your deep spiritual insights and amazing poetic gifts. Best of luck in the contest with this exquisite piece of pure poetry!
David Michaels
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you crack me up, david ...
I'm not sure that this sonnet is really outstanding, but since I wrote it originally for an assignment in my sonnet-class, which required to create an outline with clear definitions for each stanza concerning the intended message and development of it, as well as the volta, this helped my mind to actually create some structure for this poem ...
I'm glad it turned out successful ...
maa
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Wow! What a wonderful Sonnet Such a wonderful message for all too read. Excellent flow, amazing
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thank you so much for your kind words and applause, dear teresa ... I hope you are well
maa
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Bravo!
Oh my goodness! This is better than perfect! Not only a perfect form in respect to syllable count, volta and iambic pentameter but the message is so very true. I step back and watch the mistress of perfection at work.
Love,
Amera ♥
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dear amera,
I love sonnets and am taking a great class taught by dolly (mamad) at the moment, which helps me with structuring my mind a bit more, so that all the necessary elements of the sonnet are included ...
I did it rather intuitively until now, but using the brain a bit from time to time can't hurt
maa
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