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Cool






under my old broke-base
desk, i hide and stare

i cool the black
mold infesting my mind
holding it hostage

do not speak to me
i am not here







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  • Uniquely-Scarred
    August 6, 2007
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    i have to be truthful and say i dont have a clue what this is about, perhaps you could shed some light on the subject matter? i highlighted this next bit because i thought it was ammensly worded
    i cool the black
    mold infesting my mind
    holding it hostage


  • inked-destiny
    July 11, 2007
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    Silent...stirring.

    I liked it. It had a haunting abrupt end.

    Thumbs up.

  • Aurora Ceres
    July 9, 2007

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    Quite a provocative spin, I like it, a bit of a foreboding air.  Nice work. Thank you for entering and best of luck to you.

    Bella