'twas a tranquil scene, that was seen
With the waters reflecting the green
And busy whispers between the trees
Of tales from the past and all thats been....
A mild fragrance carried in the breeze.
And there was this boat, inviting her eye
To kiss those waters, thus sail and fly;
She stepped in slow, to have her ride
And immerse in the bliss of tranquil's sky..
On royal waters, would her boat just glide.
As she turned back, she felt, she saw his face,
A drop of tear from her eyelids gaze,
His voice was music, 'neath the clouds so frail,
Those beats from her heart, in a faster pace..
~ a distant memory from somewhere did trail.....
And then came pleasure to sweetly fill,
Ripples on lakes, the dew from leaves would spill,
His smile was magic, enchanted with gleams
And the kiss on her cheek, lingered still..
~ it was a stolen page, from her dearest dreams....
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In a list
A contest entry
- The Write Place by Legend.
1000 points, ended July 18, 2007, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Gold Upon Gold ( by Invitation only) by Legend.
1600 points, ended March 28, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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seems bitter sweet love...enjoyments of the moment tenderly and soulful...though not lasting but a little while...still the moment lingers and she sweetly sighs...lovely poem...lovely thoughts...
Lovely
Mal
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Lots of sentiment
gently laid down, line by line.
Descriptively wonderful.
Beauty and serenity must spring to mind. Thank you.
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Such a gentleness to this one. I could almost hear the birds in the distant trees. Wonderfully done
e~
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Indeed like said before Fantastic written. You have drawed a beautiful picture with your words. The rhyming made it flow even better and made it easier to enjoy the poem to read out loud
Good luck in the contest
Herman
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You paint a beautiful picture with both the picture and your words. This was a joy to read.
All the best in the contest...Sue
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Beautiful. Filled with visuals that spell life. I loved this. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela
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Serene, blissful and so beautiful! As always you capture beauty in every line
Best wishes!
Lynda
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Such Beauty
and words to illustrate the riches of the dream.
Very nicely done Raspberry.
Jim
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One of you best. I enjoyed reading this once more. Such a beautiful tranquility it conveys. Wonderfully rhymed and perfect flow. Very well done. ~ Sue
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So tranquil and lovely. I really enjoyed the reading of this piece
Ruth
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Welcome back thank you for your entry Good luck in the contest
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what a wonderful poem filled with serenity ...
excellent use of imagery and metaphor and elegant vocabulary make this verse a masterpiece of poetic perfection ...
all the best,
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Just lovely. This was so nice to read...tranquil and beautifully rhymed. I enjoyed it very much. ~ Sue
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Excellent, so well rhymed and the rhythm was spot on, the metaphors in this painted the scene so well, I enjoyed the read. Love, C
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Oh, Archana, Dear, this is gorgeous. Your writing just keeps getting better each time I read it, and you have written this with such wonderful imagery that it's much like watching it play out right before my eyes. Beautiful!!! Hugs, Patricia
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Thanks aunt for this lovely comment. Glad that its getting better.. wonderin when would it be at its best A way-way high from what I wrote in 2004 to now.. remember.. u were the first reader on this site for me
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Certainly looks like the write place to me - fits perfectly with the picture...loved this!
galfalfa
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Thankyou gal.. so sweet of u to stop by..
Love u loads..
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As always, beautifully written ...
Tranquil and so very lovely!
Always a pleasure to read your words..
Lynda
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raspberry I love the rhyme pattern you have used with this one, it add that special something to a beautiful poem.As ever your work paints its image in the readers mind so easily.almost making the accompanying image superfluous Great piece as always thank you for entering Good luck in the contest
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Legend, As always, your comments are soo cheering and encouraging Thanks a ton for the contest inspiration and the comment as well. Yes, I enjoyed writing this piece and loved the rhyme scheme and everything about this poem. thank you legend.
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i loved this title... and picture.. and words to follow. an overall beautiful feeling and flow of thought.
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Kristy.. thanks dear for your comment. I loved the title too.. and it just almost spontaenously came as I worked on the last line to conclude the poem.
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A beautifully written poem filled with lovely imagery! A wonderful sense of serenity in this piece. Loved the title too. All the best in this contest you've entered.
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Charming!
Beautifully penned with such a calm and serene feel to it, light and breezy with wonderful imagery and excellent flow. Well done and good luck with this charming entry for the contest.
Shaz xx
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Very beautiful.
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