As you sit with the blues
you cant help but remember
you hear the sweet music
you feel the soft touch
you smell the scent
you taste that longing taste
suddenly the music stops
a new feeling arises
the touch tast and scent disappear
theres a new feeling
it slowly consumes you
it jazzes up your blues
and makes you feel better
new music can be heard
louder than before
it has a rhythm never felt before
its jazzing up the blues
and opening your eyes
suddenly you see
the train wreck passing by
it isn't a big deal
at least not anymore
the jazzing of the blues
makes you feel like nothing before
the blues disappear with the wind
the jazz takes over
soon you get up and move on
as the jazzing of the blues takes over
the blues are now jazz
and the jazz is now your life
A contest entry
- Title contest #3 ~Jazzing up the blues~ by Virgoan.
400 points, ended July 25, 2007, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - best everything by sociaL IntollErance.
300 points, ended November 5, 2007, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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all i can say is hell yesa
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A very beautiful piece. I like how you used the repetition of the theme. Love the imagery and the flow. Great job!
My favorite lines:
as the jazzing of the blues takes over
the blues are now jazz
and the jazz is now your life
Thank you for sharing you poem and participating. I wish you all the best in the contest. Keep writing my friend.
>>>VIRGOAN
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yay
This is my favorite of your poems that I've read so far. It's different, but in a cool way! It's like visualizing someone's mindset almost... while they go from a depressed mood to a more excited, hopeful mood... from blues to jazz Good Job Girly!
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very cool concept. good luck in the contest. i can understand what you were trying to say in this, you did a good job of explaining it. one of my favorites.
Kelcey
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