The vegetation and I,
both ripening.
A prime harvest,
filled with flavor,
seemingly hollow.
I evoke the juices,
naked standing over
resilient red skin,
bashful to the knife's release.
all virginity perished.
Brush the seeds away,
the crisp motion of the blade
draws addiction.
Summer lets itself in.
The screen door presses out the thunder.
With humidity creeping up my skirt,
clothing couldn't be justified.
Before fading color competes
burdening the sweetness of my pick,
I dive dressed in the softest pink.
Branded with an obligation
to nurture the loins of my appetite.
I come with my weapon,
intent to strike,
that which might dare to please
my eyes
and then
my lips.
As the bitter guilt has left my chest,
for ravishing my crimson art,
luminous sun exposes my innocence,
barred shadows from windows
disappear.
Stark nude, with a smile adhered.
Shy pretense melts
like wax,
like skin peeling
off the face of a bell
as it turns from red
to
green.
In a list
A contest entry
- PASS THE PEPPER PLEASE.... by Dalaney.
300 points, ended July 19, 2007, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Bronze To Gold Quickie Contest- by Mercury Rising.
550 points, ended July 30, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Time For A Contest ~ Round 2~Invite Only by nichtmich.
700 points, ended August 4, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Enter any silver or bronze winning pre-write!! by freestallion.
450 points, ended September 12, 2007, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Brilliant
I think I have said this before but I will say i8t again, you have a talent for writing what at first appears inconspicuous and then it unfolds into a marvelous story that is not only complex but inspiringly beautiful. Your from another time I'm sure.
Love this one soooo much
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Wow, a really unique poem with great images and an interesting way of storytelling. Some really wonderful metaphors and images here that stick in the mind of the reader! Keep writing! Thanks for entering my contest.
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Lovely
Quirky and earthy. The first stanza is my favorite for it's imagery. Well done. Appreciate your entry.
Deb
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This is just a fabulous piece of poetry, but unfortrunately I asked for Bronze winning pre-writes only, and this is a silver trophy winner. It might have been a mistake on your part, so I won't remove it from my contest, but I'm afraid to be fair to the other contestants, the most I can award you with is an HM trophy. A really great poem though, and one that I would like you to enter again when I host a silver to gold contest, which I will inform you about beforehand.
Please don't delete you poem now though.
David
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Gorgeous
"all virginity perished."
this pushes the envelope to spill the seeds.
And the second stanza keeps me inside my mind, ontop of the rocking chair, or maybe a stance of the wind pushing further upon my chest.
gorgeous. gorgeous. -
You have a very unique style Chelsea . . . you speak with an original voice and with wild and at times startling imagery. Keep at it girl . . . there is much naked talent inside you . . . let it blossom and come to fruition . . . run freely inside your mind, the poetry you carry within is fresh and oh so riveting!!!!
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I love your poetry for its quirkiness,
for its intelligence, and for the amazing
way you hold my attention from word one...
Congrats, my friend.
Love, Lane -
damn... well done
I'm impressed... I certainly like/appreciate your take on this...
great imagery and unique comparisons...
clever title
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Hey tada!! awesome write.. i luvd the flow and the kind of style u actually used to write this one.. its really interestingly funny haha but surely a good one!!! wonderful use of lyrics... lol u r a great writer u know!! u have done a great job, i look forward to read more of yours.
God bless
-Mansoor -
That was a nice poem. Very cute little poem!, haha could be misinterpreted . *naughty*. Nice job, Fun read.
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