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Night before the hunt

Got to get up soon,
Wonder what i'll see,
Will it,
Could it,
Be,
The trophy I seek,


I sit and wait,
For the alarm,
Can't sleep,
To excited,


I Hear the other guys shuffle,
Probably,
Dreaming about the hunt,


At last,
The alarm sounds,
The moment,
I've been waiting for.

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  • Riftkin gold member
    August 10, 2007
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    this is a nice poem, Welcome to AP

    Riftkin


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    August 4, 2007

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    Welcome to AllPoetry

    GreatWhiteHunter69

    Excellent write, well flowed, simply yet strong

    Please put in your author notes what holiday this is for

    Best of luck in the contest
    Stay safe
    Enjoy AllPoetry
    ~Amanda


  • getsbetter
    August 2, 2007

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    Welcome to All Poetry !

    Anticipation is written all over this write, quick and set a good image, good luck in the contest...GETS


  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    July 31, 2007

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    Thanks for your entry

    Well I am not clear on what holiday this is for. And your author notes are a little cofusing as I do not see any spelling errors. Nice suspense and tension building. I too used to suffer the same anticipation except it was when I was little and knew I was going to Kings Dominion the next day.

    Good luck and welcome to allpoetry. I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

    God Bless
    Tammy
    Site Greeter


  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    July 29, 2007

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    Welcome to Allpoetry and thank you for entering!

    Very interesting. The anticipation is shown clearly. Please tell us what holiday this is in your authors notes

    Thanks for entering and good luck
    Faerie - Site Greeter


  • Violet Moodswing Greeters member
    July 16, 2007

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    Thanks for your entry

    And welcome to the site. This is a well written write, though I can't figure out which day you were writing about. It gives a vivid feel of anticipation and excitement. Thanks for sharing it with us and best of luck in the contest.


  • Rosemary Stroebel silver member
    July 10, 2007

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    Thanks for entering

    You capture the moment of anxious anticipation very well. Please advise what option this falls into to ensure your poem remains in the running for this contest.

    Let the ink flow and your fingers dance

    Rosemary


  • death slave girl
    July 10, 2007
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    i like your write it is very intersing


  • FifthDove
    July 9, 2007

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    Thank you very much for the entry

    Nice sets of stanza’s here, I like the second one the best, I can relate very well to it Thank you very much for taking the time to write for and enter our contest. Best wishes and welcome to AllpoetryDove


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    July 9, 2007

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    Welcome to All Poetry !

    An interesting write and I thank you for your entry.
    Could you please put the option you chose in your author notes
    The spelling is fine btw.
    Gaylene

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