How sad is it
to keep running to something
that isn’t there?
Oh, you poor girl
Why don’t you just
Wake up?
Reoccurring dreams
Cloud your thoughts
you’re falling apart
Stupid, stupid, stupid,
Silly, silly notions
Of a fairy tale
Cut, cut, cut,
Hope you can tear it out
Your attempts are well wasted
Your methods are juvenile
So put the razor down
And live...without him
You live for him
When you should live
For yourself
Author notes
I used to be a cutter. I also know that it doesn't solve anything. So please, if you need to stop, feel free to speak to me. I know you hurt, I did too.
Option #3
Cyprien
A contest entry
- Darkwrite Extravaganza, Round I by Immortal Obscurity.
525 points, ended November 7, 2007, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Skeletons in the Closet? by XHollowXEyesX.
800 points, ended June 2, 2008, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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okay I have added you as a finalist but I did say that I didnt want any poems that had won a trophy, but, it is only a HM so I am going to leave it on the list, but I will say that it will hinder the chances of winning. please feel free to enter another won or you can leave it here. awesome write still though.
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It reads almost as a put down of self and full of shame and regret. I don't see the hope in overcoming in this except for the author comments. I do admire the last stanza's they at least speak that no person is worth harming oneself over.
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I suppose it could be my self loathing and shame merely trying to identify with others that continue to do this unhealthy act. It could also be translated that the act itself is being put down. I think I set this up to be read with different ideas and concepts. Regardless, I'd like to think that despite the tone, the empathy is still there.
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this is an awesome write. It is about time someone wrote about how in the long run cutting doesnt solve anything. I love the message that you are sending out to people, and you did it with great style and use of language.
I love the line
'Cut, cut, cut,
Hope you can tear it out
Your attempts are well wasted'
Beautiful and powerful write.
Thankyou for entering
All the best
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Thank you very much
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This is a good poem. Thanks for entering my contest, and good luck.
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Thank you
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Wow... I like that you speak to the cutters in an encouraging way, and I am glad that you managed to stop yourself.We are all very proud of you for being strong enough to overcome it. Don't forget your screen name in your authors' notes. Well done, and best of luck to you!
L.
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Thank you. It's been a very long time since I've done that. Its just a very immature way to handle problems, so I quit. Thank you for the comment!
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awww
I know who and what this is about, And threw all the bullshit of what happened there is still beauty in this poem.
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You do know. You know everything about me, and that's why I loves you. Thanks for being there.
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Woo!
its no prob, What are BFF's for duh! ^_^
♥ Kimmy-Kay
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Hannah this is beautiful and so true....i think i will hug you now! *hugz*
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Thanks. I shall hug you back *hugs tight*
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