forgetting is a triumph
it is why i feel so much defeat.
letting go is such a burden
but theres nothing left to keep.
the past should be left behind
though i keep wanting to rewind.
try to push out all the pain
but i let it flow back to me like rain.
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There are some very wise words in this one, but hard to live by. The past should be left behind indeed, at least, the aweful memories and actions that have taken place...
Thanks for another entry!
Leander -
Sometimes, whether we like it or not, the past comes and bites us right in the behind and just won't let go
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simple yet productive. A nice scower through your inner conscience.
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wow this is really good, and really true. I like this alot,, shrot and yet,,, theres enougght to express all u had to say. great job
"it is why i feel so much defeat.
letting go is such a burden
but theres nothing left to keep."
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I agree with jem its another brilliant poem. never give up on anything as my grandpa says are you a can do or a cant do...although personally i think he has been watching to many adverts and military flicks. One thing i do know is never forget the past but in the same way never make it your future. its not worth it and while the past defines you it plays little in your future.
a wonderful poem and the rhyming is almost as good as mine, okay it is as good as mine but i want to save a little face don't i
keep writing and i will read, you really are a fantastic poet.
kelbornro
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Very good
but theres nothing left to keep.
the past should be left behind
though i keep wanting to rewind.
try to push out all the pain
Fine ending
Sorry for the sadness
rick
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wow just wow anne, this is truly amazing write. it has a brilliant flow which helps to create a really powerful image with the words which you have used to create a fantastic set of rhyming words. i love the concept of this poem as i know what you mean about trying to let go of something which is painful everytime you remember it, and its really hard to forget it too. this poem is so easy to relate to it can't be really this is a fantastic little write as kez says short and sweet love it
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sweet and simple
the rhyming is great and gives it a good flow to read to.
letting go of the past is hard, and this is shown clearly in this poem.
your writes are amazing,
so keep writing x
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