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The people's blue planet

The ground is saturated
With footprints, from time
Massaging, to the blue roots
Of this, sustaining planet

But we do not appreciate the Gaia
Like we grow too old, to remember the debt
We owe, our own mothers womb

Though our bodies, are temples
We do not adore them
Magazines, with pixelated omissions
Have become, the new age bibles

Living in cities, isolates us
Into Grey soldier suits
As we earn, one day into another

Until the weekend, pours the desperate
Last orders please
Down Mondays dehydrated throat

 

 

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  • kazza699
    August 25

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    I've said before I'm no expert - but I adore this... in particular, the final verse. Well done!

  • the-decieved
    February 13, 2008

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    A very good and well written poem

    this is very good and very very true... its very beautifully written and gets the message across well... good stuff


  • black lagoon x
    July 15, 2007

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    Excellent!

    Though our bodies, are temples
    We do not adore them
    Magazines, with pixelated omissions
    Have become, the new age bibles

    Living in cities, isolates us
    Into Grey soldier suits
    As we earn, one day into another

    Until the weekend, pours the desperate
    Last orders please
    Down Mondays dehydrated throat



    Great work!!!good job on this!!!!keep the ink flowing,you're doing fabulous,for sure

  • Bob Fox
    July 8, 2007

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    excellent write

    So true as we take things as a given. An exceelent eye opener you have written. Worthy of much notice


  • quietmonster
    July 8, 2007
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    Powerful stuff

    So true, sadly.


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    July 8, 2007

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    THOUGHT-PROVOKING AND SO TRUE!!!!!!!!!!!

    STUNNING WRITING. I AGREE WITH EVERY WORD WRITTEN HERE. YOU HAVE, QUITE-BRILLIANTLY, PUT FORWARD AN ARGUMENT AGAINST THE VANITY OF MANKIND. WE ARE ISOLATED AND WE WORSHIP PIXELATED OMISSIONS.

    OUR CITIES HAVE BECOME 'REPLICAS' OF THEMSELVES. AND WE HAVE LOST ALL FEELING FOR WHAT REALLY MATTERS THE MOST. WONDERFUL WRITING.

    WAYNE
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