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Red Violin

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Red Violin

O my dearest heart, thou hast shed a tear,
casting melancholy shadows within.
Your continence has brought my soul so near,
‘tis liken to a concert violin.
The burdens of many, loom in your heart
and you forgot my pain in crescendo.
I beg you dearest; set my strings apart,
hear me, without callus innuendo.
At the concerts’ end, silence fills the hall.
You pick me up, caress my finished wood.
Feel the trust, in an instrument so small
and finely tuned with love that’s understood.
So dear, see my stratovarious heart;
regain my trust and n’er tear it apart.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

English Sonnet:
Sonnets are formal poems and consist of 14 lines (3 quatrains and a couplet) , traditionally written in iambic pentameter - that is, in lines ten syllables long, with accents falling on every second syllable. The Volta occurs at L9. Source: shadowpoetry.com

For my beloved Allan.

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  • Luna Tique Fringe
    September 10, 2007
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    Perfect, perfect..just as was requested


  • Janice M Pickett
    September 4, 2007

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    Thanks for this entry. It is very good. I have put it in the book.
    Could you just check strataverious...and let me know. Thanks


  • second-born
    September 1, 2007

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    undoubtedly, this sonnet is perfect...love the flow and the heartfelt emotions...beautiful as you are...glad I've got the chance to read this fantastic poem of yours...from this contest...


  • Beating gold member
    August 4, 2007

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    I have to say that for the most part I'm not a big fan of sonnets, but this one really blew my mind. I loved it - perhaps because I love the violin, and your words just seemed to smoothing and beautiful! So amazing!


  • February Moon gold member
    July 31, 2007

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    This is a masterfully sonnet. One of my favorite on the site. I love the title by the way, so simple yet so perfect for the poem. Thank you so much for entering, and good luck to you.
    Chelsea


  • Sensual Sapphire
    July 15, 2007

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    This could be metaphorical

    or it could truly be love for the art of playing. Pieces that make you see different aspects in the same words are pure joy to read. Well done and thank you for entering.


  • And Hyetal
    July 9, 2007
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    Wow!!! You amaze me yet again! Where do you get all these coolio pictures and backgrounds, by the way? Wonderful.

    Always,
    Cassie


    • Amera gold member
      July 9, 2007

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      Thanks
      The backgrounds are stock art from the web; feel free to grab any of them.
      The pictures come from here:
      http://www.deviantart.com/


      • And Hyetal
        July 9, 2007

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        Could you give me the link for the backgrounds, too? I'm worthless at knowing how to grab them. And I didn't know you could take pictures from that site! With the copywrites and all...


  • Hetha gold member
    July 8, 2007

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    I can almost hear the music in this one. This is beyond gorgeous! I felt the tempo, the foot, and the matching metered rhyme. Perfect! You blow me away! Take a bow..


    • Amera gold member
      July 8, 2007
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      Your comments are like finding that small unwrapped gift under the Christmas tree. I love them. Thank you so much.

      Love,
      Amera ♥


  • PerVirtuous
    July 8, 2007
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    You have reached me. Found the language and the mood to make magic. Bravo!

    We do not have a Stradivarius, But my dad has a Gaspar da Salo knockoff, made by one of his students. Keep in mind Stradivarius was his student.

    You are a soloist in my heart.


  • PoetsAngel
    July 8, 2007

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    Simply beautiful! Your use of metaphor in this piece is spectacular. I have been sitting here reading this for almost 20 minutes, the imagry is very vivid, the emotion so strong. I read it out loud and the words flow nicely over the tongue.
    Another stunning piece from your golden pen

    Cathy


  • Desire gold member
    July 8, 2007

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    Gorgeous!!

    What images You have brought forth and Gorgeous form-message which stains the Mind~
    The picture is stunning~~
    You are so darn good at these forms I swoon over the presentation and inhale the scent of Your syllables!
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent also song from this violin

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


    • Amera gold member
      July 8, 2007
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      Thank you Desire. I wrote it for Allan, apparently he didn't like it. I saw he read it but he never left a comment. Who can figure men?

      Love,
      Amera ♥


      • PerVirtuous
        July 8, 2007

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        I sent you a note saying I would comment when I had time to do it right. Anyone who reads my notes can figure me out.


  • Cant-touch-this
    July 8, 2007

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    Such beautiful words from a beautiful lady...this has the feeling of deep sadness and yet longing you are truly a wonderful poetThank you so much for your beautiful words and heart


    • Amera gold member
      July 8, 2007
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      Thank you dear Sister, I love sonnets and middle english does add a beauty to them.

      Love,
      Amera ♥


  • RedAquarius
    July 8, 2007

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    Nice touch, referencing the Strat. Lovely words yet I feel rather sad and melancholy when I read this. String music always does that to me, and as I read this, I can literally hear strings playing.


    • Amera gold member
      July 8, 2007
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      Thank you for the great comment, I liked adding the strataverious to it as well. It kind of gave it more depth.


      Love,
      Amera ♥


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    July 8, 2007

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    Oh my sweet Amera...This was such a beautiful piece. It reminded me of an old movie with the violins playing in the background and she expresses her love. I just loved the picture..Exquisite...
    Soulful Woman


    • Amera gold member
      July 8, 2007
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      Smile: Your comments always make writing worth while; thank you so much.

      Love,
      Amera ♥

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