We search the beach for that special stone,
all that is perfect in our eyes.
Among a billion finding just one alone,
we search the beach for that special stone
that the waves onto the shore had thrown.
More waves mean another perfect stone arrives,
we search the beach for that special stone,
all that is perfect in our eyes.
A contest entry
- Form Poetry: The Triolet by Bambaloo.
1050 points, ended July 14, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Write A Triolet by 2lullabyhaven.
540 points, ended August 15, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Beautiful thanks so much for entering it into my contest lol
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Pretty.
Well done with the form, though there is one flaw. The third line should rhyme with the first. You'll have to fix this for it to be eligible for a prize.
Other than that, it's perfect. I hope you will consider fixing it, this really is a very lovely triolet. Well done, and thank you for entering. -
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Thank you for your comments, I love trying new
forms and hadn`t seen this one before, I hope
it ok now.
Dixie -
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Fixed.
Perfect. Much better now. Thank you for fixing it, you can be considered for a trophy now.
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