dyed dandelions
grant pyrotechnic wishes
when blown to the sky
Author notes
Option Number Five
A contest entry
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500 points, ended August 13, 2007, 36 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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The thing I have with haiku's is that they are of a higher standard then other poems because there is such few words, in such a small breath, that is supposed to express so much. So, when one is entered into a contest of mine, against longer poems, of many varieties, it just has to be that good to beat them out.
The imagery in your haiku is expressive; clear-cut. Though it does give a slight of two separate images, it really just gives the one, which the title gives away before one even reads the haiku, so there's no initial
mystery for the reader - it just is what it is.
For what it is, it's nice.
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Thank you for your honesty; I really respect that. I would just like to ask you a couple questions to get the most out of your comment:
1. Do you think it would be better with a different title?
2. How does it stack up against other haiku you have read?
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I would suggest a different title because the title gives away what it's about right off.
It's a haiku. A haiku is a haiku to me.
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quite unusual poem,decyphoring this is a bit of a challenge but I think I got the gest of it,thank you for entering good luck..mm
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if your takling about how dyed dandelions brighten the sky when blown there this is a very good poem if not its still good i just dont get it but i do like the way the words flow
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I really, really like this. Your comparison of fireworks to dandelions works so well in so few lines. You really understood the point of the option. Thank you for entering!
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A great poem - your short writes are really beautiful filled with imagery.
Luv,
Candy
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