The day has almost gone and I'm dancing as fast as I can
The night is soon approaching again
So don't let go yet, I'm still in a spin
And if I stop too soon it might all just disappear.
So if I said I wouldn't change my ways would it matter?
It's hot as hell here so do we keep dancing for rain?
Or are we simply tracing movements in the dark
Without touching each other
Still believing each of us is right and blaming everyone else...
The fire's hotter near the flame burning out of control
While clouds still gather all around us
There is no comfort in the heat we create
Sleeping in separate rooms, dreams and worlds apart.
So if I said I wouldn't change my ways does it matter?
It's hot as hell here so do we keep dancing for rain?
Or are we simply tracing movements in the dark
Without touching each other
Still believing each of us is right and blaming everyone else...
You took me so totally, body and soul
I had nothing left to give you
I paid homage at your altar and shrine
Yet still you have abandoned me.
So if I said I wouldn't change my ways would it matter?
It's hot as hell here so do we keep dancing for rain?
Or are we simply tracing movements in the dark
Without touching each other
Still believing each of us is right and blaming everyone else...
There is no comfort here at all
No, no comfort here at all...
Author notes
Option# 1. Song Title 4. Dancing For Rain
A contest entry
- Options Contest, Allowing Prewrites by AlternateCandidate.
500 points, ended August 13, 2007, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I'm taking these as lyrics, so I hope I'm right. I think you took the song title and created a very vivid story and emotion out of it; good job! I think that your language could have been a bit more creative and distinctive, but for the most part it was a very powerful piece with original and personal images. Thank you for entering!
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Yes! The lyrics and mood of this work are enthralling. There is a sense of urgency to the flow of the poem. Very well executed and melodic. I wish you well in the challenge.
Much Love ♥
Renee

