The shimmering lake reflected the moon light,
as the Loon call echoed in low and mournful tones;
so still the waters beneath the glowing night.
The shimmering lake reflected the moon light,
An Owl swooped low in most purposeful flight,
the evergreens hung heavy with nuts and cones.
The shimmering lake reflected the moon light,
as the Loon call echoed in low and mournful tones
In a list
A contest entry
- Form Poetry: The Triolet by Bambaloo.
1050 points, ended July 14, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love the picture you have painted with the words. Written beautifully, I could read it so many times over. It has a peaceful manner to it. So relaxing, makes it sound lonesome but in a very good way. I love the first and last two lines. Great write and great job on the poem.
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Lovely! Came to search for a triolet and found one
Beautiful reflections, it gives a sense of solitude, but in a peaceful way.
Excellent triolet!
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just beautiful, I so agree! I love the call of the loon & the atmosphere it evokes. You share such a wondrous and surreal vision with sights and sounds that echo vividly in form. Blue
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Just beautiful, a work of art. You do nature so well, its almost likw being home in the swamps of Florida...you captured the out door lovers attention so gracefully.........novy
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This is just wonderful, Dear PK. I once stayed at a cabin near Traverse City. There in small lake surrounded by fertile pine trees was a pair of loons and two babes. You have described the scene perfectly and stirred some warm memories!
Bravo!
Marianne
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I second Amera's take on this poem...
you captivated my imagination with this one,
my friend. I depend on imagery to take me
into poetry, and what a flight this was...
Love, Lane
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This is lovely, I followed the smooth flow so easily as you brought both images and sounds into my mind. I wanted to paste my favorite line here but it would have to be the entire poem because it all fit together so well.
Love,
Amera ♥
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Calm.
I loved the tone of it, and the words used, but this is not in the form I can consider for a trophy. If you're interested in changing it, please look at the outline written for you on the contest page. I thank you for entering.
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