You are not rare, but you are hard to find
Like a promising world cloaked in clouds of gray
Your magnetic field pulling me into your rotation
A stranger in your mist, joining you in constellation
Sucked into your gravity, I’ve fallen for you
Your atmosphere has ignited my fire
Alit in your moons radiance, my layers unfold
Birthed in your storms, I breathe you in
Aflame, I glide over the contour of your body
Waiting to exhale, I dip into your sea
Burning rock penetrates your crust
Plumes of mist rise to your mountains
Spreading throughout your body
Peaks rise and plateau… all must descend
Your quakes rattle my stones
It begins to rain… ice caps melt
Your rising ocean over flows
Limbs shaking
Everything that goes up…
Must come down
Reverberating, yodeling gale calling my name
Comet… comet! Come at your own will
My huge, hard rock grinds into your crust
Devouring your cores boiling heat
Pressure rising, I clamp on to you tight
Exhaling… Your lava engulfs me
Your fire cools me
Rolling onto your shores
I lay quivering in your sand
Your tide moves out to sea
In a list
A contest entry
- Give Me A Piece of You - for the MEN Only by StormGoddess.
740 points, ended July 30, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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very nice i loved how it was soo discreet but still dirty that is cool i loved it nice work keep it up...
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Wow! Excellent. 'Nuff said. Thank you for entering and good luck Storm
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Artful
Comet is erotic alright -what is gripping about it is the sesuality is so well handled-it flows -it sweeps- it cresendos-and all without a hint of vulgarity- it is very artfully done-
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Oh my! lol What a poem you have here! It really does belong in the erotic catergory. I wasn't sure what to expect when I clicked on it but I was pleasently surprised. Because you didn't need to get vulgar with your words but your choice of metaphors and repetition of certain images really helped me understand perfectly what you meant. It was exciting and fun and pretty all at the same time. I liked the last line best though about the tides going back out to sea. That was really clever.
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give me back my breath
This is wonderful, love the feel it sends and the heat
Thanks for entering
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Now this was very different! A wonderfully original concept...I enjoyed this read, thanks for the entry and best of luck!!!
Blessings,
Azlyn
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