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Liquid



Crystalline emotions
    clouds
  catching reflections
in his azure eyes
  liquid..


Author notes

Option 5

Water compared to tears in eyes

Prompt:water

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  • AlternateCandidate
    July 8, 2007

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    I think that this is good for such a short poem. The only problem I have with it is that I've seen the words "crystalline emotions" used to describe tears many times before, and I think that the rest of the poem would be aided by a different choice of words in the first line. I think the rest is very good, though. Thank you for entering!


  • Kaleidoscopeyes
    July 8, 2007
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    this was one of my favorites!


  • layla.
    July 8, 2007
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    Lovely imagery. Thanks for your entry.
    -esha

  • Kaleidoscopeyes
    July 8, 2007
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    beautiful!

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