The tears that I have cried
I know have not been in vain.
The way that my hands have been tied
Has only helped me to harness the pain.
I have grown to great proportions.
I have avoided all obstacles that have been thrown.
I will probably become uncontrollable
But it's the only way I have ever known.
Greatness can come from fear
Looking deep into the darkest hole.
And when I finally could see the end
An unstoppable force entered my soul.
It grows into the biggest beast
I will become the most formidable foe.
There is no place that I cannot conquer
No place that this beast will not go.
I am me, and I am proud
I know that I can walk this path.
And all your anger and violence
Cannot touch the enormity of my wrath.
You may think that you have won.
But I tower above you so strong.
You are made weak by your desires
But my desire is to right the wrongs.
So fear who I am
And fear all of my strength.
Because I have the heart to complete this
And the endurance to finish the length.
A contest entry
- RISE AND SHINE by Justusdreams.
680 points, ended October 11, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
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amazing babee xxx
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Excellent, as usual
This kind of confidence is very refreshing!
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Excellent job. I love the rhyming. It is a pleasure to read someting by someone who has found their inner strength and shouts it boldly.
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Very strong, proud poem! Loved.
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This is excellent! The rhyme scheme is great along with the message you are putting out. This is very well written and I enjoyed reading it immensely.
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Vanessa, this is superb!I recommend this poem for a bed-side read. It is so inspiring. It is like a quote from the bible for a down-trodden or a pill to an ailing man. It massages the spirit with flowing, oily words. It inspires in more ways than one. For instance, it urges that the tears cried are not in vain but a harness to pain.
And Vanessa, on a lighter note, do you sometimes cry when you are down? Just wanted to know.
You will RISE AND SHINE.
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Yeah I think trauma makes us stronger and can sometimes enable us to be ruthless to those we really do deserve it, like my ex. Nicely put here
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powerful
strong
and deep
lifes struggles are so tiring
but we must find the strength to go forward
great poem great message
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Sorry for quoting, but I need to show what I refer to...
"The way that my hands have been tied
Has only helped me to harness the pain."
Not sure if the tied hands was metaphorically expressed, but if it was I think you are really brave! For this have left me to feel helpless and victimized and flamed my sorrow. You used this to harness pain, I really think that is showing off real great strength!
This is such an inspiring poem! I hope you stay strong and "tower" far higher than you ever dreamed!!
Becks
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AMAZING!!!
wow, this is an awesome poem!!
i can feel the struggle but i can sense the great determination and how strong you are...
i have to believe that the good will win and that evil will be defeated in the end... -
A great, powerful write from end to finish.
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YES! You put the biggest smile on my face. Too many good lines to mention. I think your understanding of the power of desires and right can change the world, loved it.
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Powerful !
I really loved this!! It completely echoed how I've felt. Growing from a bad situation.. then the turn and the twist that can lead to revenge! I've had mine, it was sweet... no matter what others say. And I'm stronger for the pain!! Yep, this spoke to me alright!!
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vein = blood vein or layer like vein of gold. vain = hopeless, unsuccessful, useless. Just a thought. To me the poem says “you have made me strong enough to hurt you” or “what didn’t kill me made me stronger”. Sort of like the damaged going into vigilante mode. The emotion is strong and the picture is vivid. Good work.
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awesome
I shiver when I read it, I'm making a copy of it to keep on my Palm... Congratulations, you're a winner.
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Another powerful piece Vanessa. Makes one think is it an internal battle, a battle with the world or a battle with a really bad person who holds the feelings of others with no regard. Much to ponder in this piece of powerful poetry. Excellent!
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Oh, that is a wonderful poem. It is so uplifiting! People should write more poems like that. You did an excellent job with this poem. Be proud! I'm glad that you know you are strong.
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I really like what you are saying here. We do all become much stronger by what we have to endure and go through...even though it is very rough on us while we are going through it. "the tears that I have cried I know have not been in "vain".' We do realize that, unfortunately.. after the fact. They, the tears, aren't in vain, because we learn from them - they cleanse us and help us heal.
Nice write.
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We are what we are. None is like us.A great indepth poem that inspires. Drive away the fear by standing up to what you are.You alone think of such thoughts and put it into verse. Congrats my dear great friend.
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Very good
Hello Vanessa Reen,
Sound like someone stepping up and saying "I'm not going to take it any more" and that the abuse that I've endured only helped to make me stronger. Nice poem Vanessa. Thanks for the comment on the love poem.
"BOO"
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Beautiful, so beautiful. I luv the attitude and the clear image of the poem and its written in an amazing way and i really appreciate. The verses rhyme in a wonderful way which makes it more attractive and meaningful. And this is a strong and a deep one, i luv it!
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an awesome piece, that contrasts the strong and the weak by use of rich descriptive language. i would not like to get black listed by you.
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wow this was such a powerful poem. i loved it. ~ hdb.
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really really good
i remember writing a piece like this a while ago, so obviously i can relate to the message. i loved it so much because of the end and how you switched it all around. its definitely a courageous act. this poem deserves a lot more than this website can give it.
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You tell them! Be proud of who you are. What you have been through can only make you stronger. Everyone has their ups and downs, but you have risen from your down point very successfully. Keep on climbing up, so you can reach your goals. Don't let anything put you down. This was a great write! Keep up the great pens!
-missjilleen
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Truthfulness
Very, very good poem, well articulated, and constructed very nicely. Imagery of the hurt, the mounting rise of pressure building, the pressure known as pain. Ubtil finally we snap, and the flood gates are loosed, and others are forced to watch as we snap back.
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