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The 1812 Overture on July Fourth

Silver flutes flutter refrain
in summer evening breeze.
An old Veteran's eyes brim with tears.
Spines tingle in suspense
as flags wave to and fro.

Violin bows sway as one.
Brass marches briskly
as frantic chimes
wed chorus of church bells.
Cannon fires crescendo,
symphonic swell fills the night.

Sky rains Liberty's stars.


Joyce Josephson







Author notes

Concert at Boston Hatch Shell. The Boston Symphony Orchestra plays the 1812 Overture every year on July 4th as the climatic end to their performance.

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  • misticmoonlite gold member
    July 4
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    nice piece of musical enjoyment, thnk you for this entry, good luck
    Linda


  • BearWoman gold member
    June 10

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    A lovely piece in succinct short form.


  • Samantha Marie
    May 15

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    Wonderfully penned...
    I can hear the piece now

    Thank you for entering and good luck

  • Judith Chandler
    April 25
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    A beautiful write. That must be something to hear, would wake up anyone who had dozed off.


  • Danna Hobart
    March 2

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    This is one of the better entries that I have read so far. Thank you very much for entering my contest.


    • Freed by Mercy silver member
      March 2
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      Thanks, Danna. I value your opinion. An "almost medal" from you is better than gold from most other poets.


  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    July 23, 2008

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    I guess this would be a Summery thing to do although it would be a winterly thing for me down under. A very stirring piece is the 1812, but you left out the best part, the canons. The crescendo builds and boom sound FX or real the canon fire accents the music or was it the fireworks I'm sure it would have been great
    Cyber Artist


    • Freed by Mercy silver member
      July 23, 2008
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      Yeah, I left out the cannons and the fireworks. This was originally written with a word limit. I should go back and work those elements in.

      Thanks for the comment!


  • earthstar
    September 24, 2007

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    This write is stirring the soul. I almost feel like I am there. This is truly one of your greatest work. So brief the impact is like fireworks in the dark night sky.
    Wow
    My hat is off to you my friend.
    Truly enjoyed this read your talent is overwhelming. I truly wish you the very best in the contest. Have a wonderful day.
    Great work!


  • Riftkin gold member
    September 22, 2007

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    This is so good, I could almost hear the music and knowing it was the 4th of July, see the fireworks with the music as a backdrop.

    Riftkin


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    September 21, 2007

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    This is really good! Very simply, but beautifully described. Very well done. Thank you so much for entering and good luck.

    Jeannie


  • LadyDementia gold member
    September 21, 2007
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    created such lovely imagery, good luck!


  • MargaretG
    September 21, 2007

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    I have seen that - I think it was Canada Day!
    It is really terrific when the orchestra and the fireworks crew play in harmony and the report of the explosions comes at the right time.
    You have gathered together the right words - wonderful effect. I hope that it also communicates to someone who has not been there!


    • Freed by Mercy silver member
      September 21, 2007
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      Thank you! I lived in western Canada for 5 years. I remember fireworks on Canada Day (July 1st?) as well as an intenational competition of fireworks in Vancouver, BC we attended.

      I also remember seeing the broadcast from Boston back then. Now, I'm back home, 15 miles from Boston.


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    July 7, 2007

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    Beautifully written and love the alliteration there as we;;
    Thanks so much for this entry
    gaylene


  • pattyann4500
    July 7, 2007

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    Well, I'll certainly be there watching your wonderful and energetic parade. Good luck in the contest. Hugs, Patricia

  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    July 7, 2007
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    Your Prompt is: "MUSIC"

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