MACBETH! MACBETH! MACBETH!
Tempted by Witches' prophecies
Thy murderous ambition and greed
push thee forth to attain
what is not rightfully yours!
Moving you to murder and deceit,
power and tyranny over the innocent!
Thy ambitious and blood-thirsty wife,
who wants thee to become
the serpent underneath the flower.
Oh Macbeth! Thou hast no heart!
No love, no pity, and no good in you!
You killed the king and blamed his sons,
You killed your best-friend and tried to kill his son,
You killed a woman and her children!
Blood! Thou hast become hungry and thirsty for it!
Like a wild animal that first tasteth blood.
Thou canst get enough!
And why?
All because of Witches' with beards
and their tales.
But how dost thou end thy life?
Also by the Witches punned prophecies!
The first apparition said:
"Macbeth! Macbeth! Macbeth!
Beware Macduff!
The Thane of Fife."
This, you thought of as easy,
for Macduff is bound to come to avenge
your foul and brutal murder of his family.
The second apparition said:
"Macbeth! Macbeth! Macbeth!
Be bloody, bold, and resolute, laugh to scorn
the power of man, for none of woman born
shall harm Macbeth."
This is quiet plain,
how can a man be not born of a woman?!
But Macbeth knoweth not
the paradox in the Witches' words and works!
These words give thee
false pride and false security.
The third said:
"Be lion-mettled, proud and take no care
who chafes, who frets or where conspirers are,
Macbeth shall never vanquish'd be until
Great Birnam wood to high Dunsinane hill
shall come against him!"
How can a wood walk?
The apparition's words are another pun!
Macbeth, thu hast become proud and fearless,
thou knoweth naught of thine end
that is come!
Macbeth! Macbeth! Macbeth!
Macduff hath come!
Birnam wood is here!
Macduff is not of woman born!
Macbeth! Macbeth! Macbeth!
Thou hast believed the words of the Witches,
thou hast murthered to fulfill
the prophecies given to thee,
and now thou shalt fall,
for thy murderous ambition,
thy bloody soul,
and thy tyranny!
Macbeth! Macbeth! Macbeth!
Thy end is here.
Punishment for thy lies,
thy ruthless cruelty,
and thy treachery.
Thy end is here, Macbeth!
By: Nada Adel Sobhi
Author notes
This is my second entry and it is loads better than the other one which is "oh Elinor"
What is written between inverted commas "..." is quoted word for word from the book. Please be honest, I worked really hard on this!!
For the contest: I think this is my best pre-write
for another contest: Qwerty
In a list
A contest entry
- Literary Classics by CinematicInk.
325 points, ended July 7, 2007, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Books by Torchwood.
415 points, ended January 8, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrites Contest by tears.of.silence.
1000 points, ended April 18, 407 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Happy Birthday! William ShakeSpeare! Hip Hip Horray! by Lanasaur.
400 points, ended June 5, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything goes by Dryad Enya.
650 points, ended June 26, 42 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Firstly thank-you so much for reading the rules! This is beautful a traditional shakespeare poet, he'd be proud i'm sure. You obviously have a knack for this so well done and i'd advise you to keep writting!
Best wishing and good luck
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Wow
This is really intresting and good. A beautiful tribute to William. Well done!
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You made me think:
Did the witches have beards because they were aging women (and hags of course). Or were they men in drag, plotting sedition?
You captured the dramatic quality of the play.
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oooo i loved macbeth. great work. this poem earns you a 4 which now gives you 50 points. great work. thanks for entering the contest and best of luck to you. kahy
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Most incredibly written!
The time and thought you put into this piece shows quite awesomely, my friend!
A fine sharing this is!
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Well dun. I absolutely luv MACBETH. good luck
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Wonderful write! I love the story of Macbeth! I'd love to have a go at playing Lady Macbeth, she was an ice queen! Great imagery and word setting. My favourite line was:
'Thy ambitious and blood-thirsty wife,
who wants thee to become
the serpent underneath the flower.'
It's inspired me to write something. Thank you for sharing this great write!
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THIS IS AMAZING!
WOw this is just so beautiful -- I have not read your work in any recent time and now I am most glad to have, I shall look into it further.
Brilliance!
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Macbeth is a symbol that has its sigificance even today...
we see people around us...
lusting for power...
killing...
plundering...
all for their vested interests...
You chose a meaningful theme..
and you wrote in a clear tone...
without any ambiguities...
Thanks for the good write, honey!
Kisses!
Galaxy2
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Priceless!
I love Shakespeare, and don't often get the chance to review works on his own. This is well done-very nice.
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Superb
Incredible!!! You brought back to mind the entire play. Extremely well written, indeed. Your imagery is just fine. Thanks for sharing this one. -
I was pulled into this poem by the title and was surprised by what lay within. Paying tribute to a great author and an incredible play is commendable, but doing it with real style, flair, passion and appreciation for the work is an art. Macbeth is surprisingly not one of my favorite Shakespearean piece but I did enjoy the poem you put together from it, espeically the way you put in direct quotes. For me that helped bring the poem more character and I enjoyed that.
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Wow
This is excellent! I really enjoyed reading this. Great word choices. ~Gar -
OMG! I loved it! Awesome job, loved the old english. It was brillant! It reminded me so much of the original and brought back some of the main themes in the actual play. Awesome write, you can tell you worked so hard on this! Great Job!
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wonderful
very crafty write. but then I love witches.....
loved "witches with beards" and the ruthless cruelty an treachery.
alltogether very well worded thought provoking write. please keep writing??????
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(I live a handful of miles from Dunsinane Hill, and you truly can see Birnam wood from there)
It is very difficult to outdo Shakespeare with one of his own characters or stories. It is very difficult to avoid standing in his shadow. I think you tried very hard and gave it all you had, but - minority report - didn't quite emerge.
One clap for the gold trophy last year, and one more for the effort you put into this.
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Wow, superb. You synopsised the entire play of Macbeth and made it sound very poetically sound. Nice use if language and narrativ.
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Great job!
This was wonderful. I love the style used and the way it seemed almost Shakespeare like. I could understand this a lot better though. Thanks for sharing.
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Wow... This is really amazing...
wonderful job on this one, poet
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Yes,it shows that you made a great effort in the piece...
Brilliant.
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NICE...xo!!!!
I love shakespeare its very difficult to get a grasp of but when you do its amazing it opens whole new worlds!!!
And its even more difficult to write in shakesperian but you nailed it
a really talented write!!!
LOVE IT <3!!
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Excellent work!
To write in the Shakespearian style is a lot of hard work (some of my own have been in ye olde english) but you really pulled it off.
Really did the play justice here and stuck to it so well.
Really is an excellent piece of poetry! The Bard would be proud!
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oddly, macbeth is one of my favourites of Shakespeare...I'm not sure why. YOu stayed true to the story, adding your own flavour, so kudos for that. Was it a school project? I wonder what caused yout o write it?
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Wicked!
Macbeth is one of my favourite plays and when i read this it felt like it could really have been an extract. You must have researched it well.
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I loved this poem! I love Macbeth!
I was surprised at the end of the play the first time I read it because I kept asking myself how a man be not born of a woman...but Shakespear...tricky Shakespear...what a clever guy...
This was excellent...it got the gold and it was well deserved.
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Outstanding
the serpent underneath the flower.
I really liked this line with an unexpected image and the way you look at the tragic story of Macbeth with fresh insight and a dramatic flow of words. This poem is full of intensity and I thought it flowed very well. Congratulations on the gold trophy.
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Wonderful, well done, and congrads on the gold for it, it's well desirved.
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Nice work, however I don't think this will win, so I'm going to remove this from the contest. [I have 100 entries.. it's easier to stay organized by doing this] Thanks for entering though.
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wow what a take on the old play of MacBeth
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on of my favorite plays.. good job
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bravo
You have the Shakespearean style down rather nicely. It is very well done over all ( I think you have an error in about line 27 "This is you thought....") bravo... bravo.. bravo...
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Well I thought is was brilliant as you have already a gold trophy for it, it speaks for itself. I did not read the book but your poem sums it up nicely. All the best of luck though I dont think you need it. Ami
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I loved this! Most importantly I love Macbeth, it's one of the only Shakepeare I actually really like. I loved the constant use of the exclamtion mark, really keeps the face pace up. I loved that fact that it's written in such a vicious way too, really emphasising Macbeths acts. Really enjoyed this, you deserved the gold indeed! =]
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this is absolutely glorious girl
this is powerful and the use of words is great, vocabulary and the images from the story are great, all details and telling of the story of macbeth's evil deeds and end. stupendous. i have taught it and loved it and loved the lessons it preaches. it deserved the Gold trophy girl. wonderful!
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This is really an impressive piece of literary poetry. Nicely done. Congratulations on the gold and best of luck in Nam's contest.
- joanne
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o and katscradle has no clue whats shes talkig about...
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Macbeth is my favorite. We read it for english class and i read it 5 times rather than the required one...but thats beside the point...i think the flow is a little off but other than that its a really good work and captures the tale quite well
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An accurate portrayal of Macbeth's journey into cruelty and lies. This would have been amazing if you could have managed iambic pentameter, but it was still a good read.
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ONE MAJOR FLAW
MACBETH WAS THE KINGS SON IT WAS HIS UNCLE WHO KILLED HIS FATHER AND MARRIED HIS MOTHER TO USERP THE THRONE, I KNOW BECAUSE I HAD TO WRITE A BOOK REPORT ON THIS IN SCHOOL.. THE POEM ITSELF IS EXCELLENT EXCEPT PLACING THE BLAME ON THE WRONG PERSON -
This is amazing...I love it!!!!
I'm thrilled with this write..
Bravo...well deserved win...
Peace
~A~
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I think you did a most remarkable job with this, although I don't really care for Macbeth but I am most certainly glad that you sent me this link to read this. Good luck to you in the contest.
**Master Ktulu**
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This poem is amazing. It portrays Macbeth correctly, it has great imagery, I love that you wrote in the olde style. It is just all around awesome.
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i like it, very much!
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You deserve that trophy!
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LOVE IT! It's neat that you wrote like Shakespeare. Thy friend, you are a true artist!You truly did your research! I admire this piece, it did not go to waste!
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