Please.
Look back for a second,
Just one
Second.
That's all I need
From you.
Over your shoulder
A glance through your dark brown hair.
Every time I stick my head
Out of my books,
I look your way.
In the common room, anywhere.
Come on.
Just once.
Oh my god!
Longbottom finally looked!
Author notes
I picked the second option. Not sure if it's any good, please comment!.
A contest entry
- Harry Potter by Corinthians13-4.
430 points, ended June 9, 2008, 17 entries
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Comments
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I really liked this, though for some reason I would've thought she was talking about Ron. Oh well, it was good nevertheless, reminded me a lot of the writing style used in some of my own poetry, so I ain't gonna diss that. Good job.
**Erin -
I was really hoping that who she was talking about would be a surprise, i'd would have liked it if it was a lot longer, I might write more, but very glad you liked it :]
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Wow! I was wondering who you were talking about until the end there.
Nice imagery with the looks and "Every time I stick my head
Out of my book"
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