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Communist Comonwealth

I don't care for the news,
It don't matter to me,
I don't care for teenage blues,
Virtual Reality
Is a mediocre substitute, for underage prostitues,
Industry Conspiracies,
Are selling kids, beer and weed,

The Modern World of Convenience,
Communist Commonwealth.
The Modern World is our best friend,
Communist Commonwealth.

Author notes

This is the chorus of a punk-rock song I'm writing, I have all the music down, but the verses are giving me a lot of trouble. The lyric so far came to me as I walked down the street, after looking at a tabloid newstand for a few minutes.

The music for the verses is quite fast and has a rhythm sort of like-
dudududu-dudududu-dudududu-DU--DU--DU

, please comment your ideas for verses

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  • no-longer-a-member-
    July 24, 2007

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    An interesting song, the title pulled me in
    punk rock definately isn't my forte (just don't tell anybody)
    but I like this... best of luck getting the rest of your song down.


  • prejudice4pride
    July 24, 2007

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    ok this was cute. i liked how it was realy short. it kinda made what you were trying to say come accross alot better. great job!


  • Tweedle Dum
    July 7, 2007

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    LOL the dududu thing made me laugh, cause thats how i explain music on the internet...I think its pretty awesome lyrics though. I like the word apocolypse. It might sound cool in some verse. I dont know, just saying. Okei dookie. bye.