Tilted expression
Of a westward laughter up ahead
I'll pull the sky down
To see you smile
Chewing on the small bits of dreams
Giving a proposal for the wind
To carry me away in those things
Tearing at the ground
To find evidence of the earth
I can't even fathom you at all
I guess it's what we all must get
Just a little bit
I'd never seen the sun so black
Facing flowers for the truth
That maybe you could meet me there
Beneath the tightening of roots
Or just the curls of my hair
I never really paid any attention
To the last drowning words
Drowning in dirt
It was a certain kind of hurt
Tired of the blinds
Pulled against the light
To find equally shadowed friends
Waiting on the night
Tilted Universe
I quick glimpse of the stars
Have we all not attended the meetings?
Beneath the trees
And weathered hearts
I saw you standing on the bridge
Frusterating yourself
Of a black and white melody
Swallowed guilt
You spit out the pieces
Of my soul
Landing under the lions paws
I'd have given a guess
But I'm still a little raw
On all the edges that have given
A decent stab
Imagine that
Author notes
I don't know.
I think it's weird.
Sort of inspired while listening to music.
I like though.
A little.
I think the title is funny...
I almost called it..."Tilted Is Me"
But then I realized a few seconds ago how much cooler Tilted Title is.
Confusing too.
Butter knives are the friendlist knife.
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Very strong imagery, especially in the Tilted Universe set. That part is my favorite, because I understand that the most, and I feel like I can relate to what you are saying. It seems to speak of pain, maybe broken heart, and maybe the inability of two people to work it out the way they should, like something stupid is in the way, and they should be able to get past it, but can't. The one on the bridge, frustrated, and the other, hurt...and they need to meet somewhere in between and work it out.
Yep, that's kinda sorta my confusing take on the matter. It's still wonderful, because you are a gifted writer!
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Well, let me tell you. Your take on the matter just explained the basis of my living. Hah, seriously, I gaped a little at your comment. Pft psycic. Thankyou.
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I am drowned with such abstract words. It quite a riddle for me really what do the poem means? It make me really think. I should be reading this again, again, again. When I am reading this lots of images fly anywhere inside my head. Such an imagination you have there.
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THaNKUoOo
Hehehe..Its okay its suppose to be hard to you know..take in. I mean i didn't do it on purpose but its really just a lot of metaphors. LOL i never come right out and say something usually. Imagination? Here? Yes I have one. I'm glad it made you think though
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Hmm... I'm not the biggest fan of random rhyming in a poem, I find it hard to read the poem with a smooth sailing flow... but I also like your style... Some of your imagery is quite powerful and abstract and emotional at the same time... Nice work.
Ryan
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Yeah i know, but i just think if I'm going to say something, I'm going to say it how I want..I guess?? LOL. My older work is more put together, but hmph, it gets tiring. Anyhow, thankyou very much, thats pretty much what i was going for.
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I like it very powerful the emotions that flow thoughout the poem. I love the lines "I'll pull the sky down
To see you smile
Chewing on the small bits of dreams"
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Thankyou again...I loved the fact i thought of that line. LOl. Well okay, got to finish my cereal. (its true that frosted flakes are pretty great)
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