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nothing but the rain

I used to think
you were special,
different than all the others.

I thought we shared
more than the
usual pair.

But, given time
to sit and reflect,
I see a different
pattern in my
once perfect masterpiece.

Flawed, with selfishness,
that I had been too
blinded to see.

No, you do not ask for much,
that is correct.
But, neither do you
give up any
of yourself.

 

 



My masterpiece was made
of watercolors
and it rained.

 

 

 

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  • Cwm
    October 9, 2007

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    Looks like I over-looked this one. This was very plaintive and a reflective piece. Wished I would've read this one again and again. Thank you though for entering.


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    August 31, 2007

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    Oh my dear! We are always going through the same things at the same time! How odd. I have been missing you and worried for you as well! I love you...and I mean it!

    Az


  • aboomer silver member
    August 31, 2007

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    wow

    This is beautiful! I love what you are saying here...the pictures we 'paint' aren't always reality. And the reality, once we see it, is like a watered down watercolor painting - something blurred, something that has been rained on.
    Loved the wording, the emotion and feeling and the flow to this. Loved it all.
    Especially loved...'my masterpiece was made of watercolors, and it rained'
    Great write!


  • Cherokee
    August 17, 2007
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    Cool!


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    August 13, 2007

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    Stunning Writing!!!

    STUNNING WRITING!!!
    I love this Betsy. It is so true too. So many people are just made up of watercolors until you get deep inside them. Then you see their true colors. This is a stunning piece of writing that I enjoyed reading a lot. Keep it up Betsy.

    Wayne
    x


  • Riftkin gold member
    August 10, 2007
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    awwww to lost a masterpiece because of the rain is never any fun

    Riftkin


  • Candy6
    July 18, 2007

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    Amazing

    Very beautiful water color painting and beautiful poem. This is so creative. I like the creativity. I used to do the water color painting of the nature especially flowers a long time ago. I am might go back doing the water color painting....I don't know when. Poetry is a form of the art, too because you express your feelings and thoughts through the words to create the beautiful poetry. When we read poems we think about the image that was in the poem.


    • purpledragonfly
      July 28, 2007
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      Thank you for the wonderful comment!! Beautiful and so thoughtful! I would love to be able to paint!! I'm lucky when I can find the right words to express myself , but I try. You should paint!!!! Don't give that up Betsy


  • lee-sharp
    July 16, 2007

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    swell. i havent used that word in a while. this was very approachable and relatable. the image fit perfectly. i <3 you. you write amazing corrupted perception pieces.

    • purpledragonfly
      July 16, 2007
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      swell!! wow-word i haven't seen in awhile I thank you for your kind words and so glad to see a comment from you at all !!! Makes my day ! Betsy


  • pen-inhand
    July 8, 2007

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    Amazing

    This has captured my heart. What a poignant, beautiful write. "My masterpiece was made of watercolors and it rained." My favorite part. Wonderfully written. hugs, Kelly

    • purpledragonfly
      July 8, 2007
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      thanks Kelly!!! This was a fun one to write - since it fit my mood and situation perfectly so good to get things out... on ap. Thanks for reading!! Hope all is well with you! Been busy here! take care and I'll be on more soon Betsy


  • My Darkness
    July 8, 2007

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    beautiful! this is so powerful, i too have a similar situation i am dealing with like this, thank you for sharing! great write!


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    July 7, 2007
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    So beautiful. good luck

    whisper


  • Desire gold member
    July 7, 2007

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    Aaaaaaaaaaw Dangggggggg

    Now why You go and do that

    Powerful piece You have penned and the ending just tugged at the Heartstrings
    Just loved this and the metaphors used!
    Thank You for sharing this busy bee!

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

    • purpledragonfly
      July 7, 2007
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      thank you for such a beautiful comment - you are so sweet!!!! watercolors are made to get wet and change so all is good Betsy

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