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An Open Letter, or something Diff Rent










Should I
touch my heart to you,
should I
wrap my words round you,
should I?

and if
I should
what then?

would the forests weep
would the sparrows sing
would they?

and if,
they should
what then?

Will I
dance in the dark,
will I
tremble with desire,
will I?

and if I should
will you
hold me,
will you?

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1/10/1997
Written August 22nd, 2003

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  • Madhumita
    September 9, 2006
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    WOW, something new! A different, light-hearted poem, I enjoyed reading it!
    The flow was excellent, and so was your style of writing!
    Though a short poem, it was wonderful to read and I truly appreciate your effort!
    Once again, a beautiful write...

    Madhumita


  • combateye
    September 8, 2006
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    Very nice love the flow
    and if
    I should
    what then?

    I ask my self this all the time
    again very nice keep on writing thanks for sharing


  • cvillelisa
    September 8, 2006
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    This has Date. Not Contemporary. These things make my palms sweat.

    I'm not right. I know.

    Lisa


  • poeticsparks
    September 7, 2006
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    WoW.. nice style and ryhme


  • Tiffany Amato
    February 16, 2005
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    I hope someone has held you. Very touching.
    Keep Feelin' Fascination,
    ~Tiffany~


  • rhiannon 11
    August 31, 2003
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    Sometimes I just feel vulnerable like this, not only with a poem I am indecisive over sharing (a rarity), but moreover, with the masses. Usually I get it out there, then months later think to myself: OUCH! How could i put that out there to be devoured?
    Rhiannon 11 (Sarah)

  • Musical-Me
    August 24, 2003
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    beautfull words ,thank you for comment me on mine iam not a writer
    oh yea my mom is lisaannec but change it to leance she made me a site for me to
    Musiacl-Me

  • Odyssey
    August 23, 2003
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    "would the forests weep"

    For verses torn
    to the four corners of the wind
    to the dark side of a lonely planet
    Would I weep for words of beauty
    written on scraps of forest's tears
    and sent to all the corners
    of my lonely planet...


    Edited on Aug 23, 9:20 because ''.

  • Valkricry
    August 23, 2003
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    Would you read my words,
    then crumple them,
    toss them away?
    Or cherish them
    forever and a day?
    ~~~Val


  • jenneddin silver member
    August 22, 2003
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    so tender and vulnerable these words.....

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