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Struggling to Find My Way

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Overlooked, unnoticed,

I struggle to find my way

in life.

Wandering aimlessly,

I linger in oblivion...

lonely as a cloud.
.:'':.

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Prompt: I wandered lonely as a cloud...
10/20/20

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  • Namita
    July 8, 2007

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    This is clearly a simple yet great poem. Pretty long but conveying. I liked this. Best of luck.

    Luv,
    Candy


  • freestallion
    July 7, 2007
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    This is a nice poem, very clear and easy to understand. It creates lovely images, but there could have been more originality. There are some cliches, such as "I struggle to find my way in life," and "wandering aimlessly," and also you literally used the words "lonely as a cloud," which you could have instead changed to create more unique images. But overall, this is a sweet poem that has a great meaning!


  • freestallion
    July 7, 2007

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    Thank you for entering my contest!

    Your prompt is :

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    Deus ex machina
    OR
    I wandered lonely as a cloud…


    Good luck!