Silver rivers
of moonlight
fall where we were
casting reflections in my eye
moments secretly remembered
scintillating light flashes
{glance} the mirror shows a picture
you and I, dancing hip to hip
slow and smooth, moving in perfect time
to music only we can hear
lost in the moment, I turn my head
{to look at you}
and see a sterling shadow
on the window's glass
you, turning as the sun rises
turning your edges golden
with a smile just for me
{smile} just for me to hold
until we meet again
*click*
golden light fills the room
he sits up, looking
{for you}for me
I slid back into bed
watching the reflections
Author notes
first time I've tried something like this, so I need pointers
In a list
A contest entry
- Ssshhhh! Don't tell him that I love you! by Lavender Butterfly.
300 points, ended July 7, 2007, 4 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Well Done
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you sound like no such thing. I appreciate comments always, no matter how repeated they appear to be. THANK YOU!!
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Beautiful piece. Such wonderful vocabulary. Beautiful rhythm and flow throughout the entire poem as well as amazing imagery. No wonder the Gold. You deserved it
Good job! 
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BEAUTIFUL!!!!
Such a sweet way of looking back on loving and beautiful times.
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ooh I love the imagery and strength of your poem here! The arrangement is provocative and your words are so true and touching. Congratulations on the gold
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Congrats on the gold! This is a beautiful mixture reality and dream (at least that is how I see it.) Your diction and enjambments, all spot on.
Love and peace always,
mj.
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is it bad that I "enjambments" rings no bells with me? Haha, I don't know all the terms asociated with what I write, I just write what feels right
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this is very beautifully written. thanks for the read and keep on writing
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YAY!
You ROCK Cai!
Congratulations on your gold!
I've been telling you all along how well you write...are you starting to believe me now?
Way to go Sweetie!
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maybe starting...
thanks for the support!
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A most HEARTY congratulations on the gold!!! AWWWWSOOMMMEEE
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thank you very very much! I'm still just O.o about it, but I'm happy
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Awesome
This is wonderfully written, sweetie! A most open and sincere sharing of your heart; I LOVE this!
I wish you all the best in this contest; this is so well done!
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Wow Cai...I'm impressed. Was this just your muse speaking to you? Or do you have a secret crush on someone? Whichever the case may be, It's a wonderful piece
All the best to you in the contest!
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I'm going to go with a little bit of both...most of the crushes I've had have been secrets of some kind or another, but my muse re-found her voice just today, so....
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This was great. i was looking at this contest. good luck. Refleftions, literally. I thought that it was a gret title too. your a great writer, good luck
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thanks, I'm glad you liked it
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This is amazing ~ so full of meaning and expressive description. Loved it... x Thanks for sharing. Love and light, Butterfly.
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Thank you so much for holding this contest! I liked the idea and ran with it (as you well know)
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