Rants and Lies; Honesty and Tears
Ears attended,
Yet heart refused,
Such is the fate,
Of your convincing lies, unmasked.
Liar!
Your affairs,
Three real ones,
Then online ones,
Dont you dare Judge my worthiness through wonton acts.
Your excuses, again.
Truth to be told,
That I secretly wished to be released,
But my heart is bound with matrimony vows and circumstance.
But I assure you,
That this chain of love on my finger will be found broken,
If you go
too far.
Witnessing today,
Just whisked me further away from your promised love.
Never did I know,
Truth slaps so hard.
Must I play sex temptress?
And seduce you from all your addictions?
Just to salvage whatever that I once loved?
Many versions of eroticism are merely substitutions, not redemptions.
How sad,
My world and words are spiked with so much heartfelt refuge.
If, ultimately,
Everything just simply amounts to this simple reason
You dont want me anymore.
Then, be gone.
Let me drown in my own tears.
Condolences from watching others could hardly dab.
Author notes
(Anger)
The last letter poem i wrote before making the decision to divorace the abusive man i was married to.
Yes He got to read it!
Its over ..my life goes on to more and better things!
In a list
A contest entry
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A very emotional write. No one really knows this sort of pain until they themselves must endure it. A thoughtful piece, though the direction wavers, more personal than anything. Thank you for your entry!
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Wowww, how powerful and amazing is this piece ! I loved it. I loved the attitude of not letting him tear you down and just everything. You have definite strength ! And this piece proves just that.
"Witnessing today,
Just whisked me further away from your promised love.
Never did I know,
Truth slaps so hard."
Those are some deep lines! Especially the last one. Absolutely loved this :] Keep writing ! <3
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In my life, I have not been an angel nor healthy. I am working on the healthy part and God is charge of angels. There is a poem of mine that was written about co-dependency but turns out to be addiction. Also I know that the greater the arrogance: the greater the fear. Sleeping with other woman is never about love it is about inadequecy. Take care of yourself, for if you don't love yourself and do what you need for you than you are not doing anyone good. Love reveals itself and I love many. Relationships are a lot of work and the number one I work on is my marriage. Best of luck.
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Yes, know your emotions. Some men seem to think they have the right to have mistresses,and then leave you at home with the kids.I am frustrated by hearing your situation. Well written, and all I can say Thank God for the Lord....He will yet see you through
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well seems like you two can really lay it down. This was a well thougth out piece penned to perfection. Bravo on a great effort of team work. May each of you find the happiness of the pen, as it flows beatifully from hearts to hearts. Awesome job
always a pleasure Aodes, thanks for sharing.
Tory
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a good poem, I really like this atanza alot.......Must I play sex temptress?
And seduce you from all your addictions?
Just to salvage whatever that I once loved?
Many versions of eroticism are merely substitutions, not redemptions....... best wishes on the contest...
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this was very intruiging how after so much a person can still give another a chance the truthfulness of this piece is great
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Very powerful
Truth slaps so hard! took my breathe away and left me a little daze. The way you build on the last stanza was great captivating. The raw emotions can be felt all thru out the poem. Then for the two of you to feed off each other with such harmony is great! Nice picture it bares such likeness to you.It gives the feel of a survivor.
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this is such an awesome job. I like the poem so much.
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This one was really really good. I liked it a lot. I really liked the line part that goes
Never did I know,
Truth slaps so hard.
It was really really good. I liked this a lot. Thanks for entering -
"That this chain on love on my finger will be found broken" this poem touches my heart. awesome line but i think the first on should be of. the vows are so strong and lasting.. not something walked away from.. no matter how we are hurt... stay strong.. hold on. know you're not alone
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wow...almost as mine
you penned this so sincere,deep within your worlds
good job on this you two, good luck and hope you win something...mm
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Very heartfelt and expressive
This stance sis; tells it all. It's good to let out all the anger and frustrations. You are a fighter,never give up or in my sweet sister. (LISA)
"How sad,
My world and words are spiked with so much heartfelt refuge.
If, ultimately,
Everything just simply amounts to this simple reason –
“You don’t want me anymore.”
Then, be gone.
Let me drown in my own tears.
Condolences from watching others could hardly dab"
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great work
i appreciate your honest/rebellious/it is what it is/i don't give a fuck style of writing. some situations call 4 such drastic measures. i really relate to this style of writing and the anger i can feel through your words. -
so fearless, terrific
you go, girl
wow
so much emotion, very powerful
it's great to have a forum to vent
i identify so much
as my wife was the one that cheated
but, alas, the past, a long time ago
a verse with your energy, hope, inspirations, commitment to the marriage, friends, family
might be a clever way to get back on track
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'Never did I know,
Truth slaps so hard'
powerful lines these...
ya can't miss the pain that's powering your words.
wouldn't it be welcome if they'd sometimes just leave?? it takes the decision off of us. emotions wavering back and forth can drive you nuts!
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Well done my friend
His actions are bad it sounds like but just try your best to forgive and not get bitter over it. Maybe he doesnt deserve forgiveness but you need to do it for yourself.
This is well spoken. No you cannot become a temptress and seduce him back. It wont work. Besides it sounds like he needs help and nothing you can do to make him desire only you. I am sorry my friend. God bless you , Mark
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In the sorrows of one the other revils in joy
So sad and I know what that side feels like and I can still feel the sting from such a slap of reallity. But
some men will continue to play as long as they know their wife is right where he wants her to be . But upset his perfect plan and the fun is jerked right out from under his feet. One***Have someone come in and empty the memory from the computor and let him believe it just cratered. two**** dont follow your regular schedule and come home at all different times . Go away for a few days without a note . Oh they do like to turn things around when it comes to you asking him where he had been but when he has to ask you he cant think of others for he doesnt know where you are
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Amazing write...your heart simply spills upon the page..
Bravo to you and Aodes..Its so wonderful when you have a friend who can help you say those things that are sometimes just too difficult to say..
Peace..
~A~
Best wishes with this entry..
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my condolences
The cheating of a lover who is supposed to stay true can kill as ull inside. I am sorry for what has occurred to you, and I hope he gets what he deserves in the end. -
the story line is that of so many and therefore not all that original, but the presentation and language used did make it a worthwhile read. I like the emotions that are changing back and forth throughout the write [as if questioning if it all is really worth it]. Best wishes in the contest,
reenie
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Beautiful
I deeply admire the style of writing. And the emotions that ooze out of every word.
Bravo.
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Splendorbabe
This was a very good writing...filled with lots of pain and that was portrayed very well here.
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this poetry is so beautiful and i enjoyed every part of it and its just so amazing that i couldnt stop reading it and was curious about the end, a great flow and a great style of writing. i love this work...!
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beautiful
the whole thing was amazing. it was enjoyable to read because of the way you put the words together. it was definately a powerful poem as well. i loved it!!
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touching write
much love and caring here, and your words from your heart are well spoken.Your story is filled with anguish and pain, as no one wants to be used, married or single.
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