Bring me up
Then throw me down
Punch me hard
Until I hit the ground
Hold me still
So I don't run
Use a knife
Or a gun
I am defenseless
The way you like to abuse
For your amusement
But what do I care
You never thought of me twice
Telling me I'm a waste of life
Too bad for you
I'm 18 and gone
My life is all right
Now that I am done with you
Leaving all the things you put me through
Its the best feeling I have ever felt
Makes my heart melt
Bye mom
Hope you understand
Now you need someone to hold your hand
To help you out in your time of need
Never did you stop and see that one day you would ask for my assistance
But I knew this day would come
Now I laugh in your face
To me you are despicable
And you will always be a disgrace in my mind
Bye , hope this memory never leaves your pathetic mind.
Author notes
This poem if for July 31st Parents day.
I want to be your brother.
A contest entry
- [LoveAQuickie] by whiterabbit..
450 points, ended August 18, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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hey nice work you have here...i don't have much expirience with poems but i think this one was pretty good and i acept you as my brother...adding you on my page now
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Very interesting poem and apprioach. you are not afraid of taking chances and that is good,
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This is really good and a very strong write. There are a lot of emotions here. The anger is very visible but it's sad too. Great job.
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Welcome to AllPoetry
Darkwish
Very strong and sad write you have penned.
The emotions reach deep into the readers mind to burn and come alive
Well done
Best of luck in the contest
Stay safe
Enjoy AllPoetry
~Amanda
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welcome to the site and keep penning great poems
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WOW - bitter tears
You rocked the world
Thanks
Good luck in the contest
B D
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Welcome to Allpoetry! Thank you for entering the contest. I felt alot of hurt in this poem, definitely screams throughout the poem. I felt more of a letter than poetry because there was not pattern to the poem. But, that's how most of us start out and end up writing some of the best poetry ever voiced. Good luck in the contest...GETS
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Thanks for your entry
It is a sad and horrible thing to live with abusive parents. They can take your life away just with their hurtful words. Add to that physical abuse and it kills a childs soul. I hope that your life is much better now and will continue to be better.
Good luck and welcome to allpoetry. I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy
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Welcome to Allpoetry and thank you for entering!
What an awful thing to have happen. The fact that you are able to share it, and write about it is something to aspire to. I felt that the rhyme was forced, as though you wanted to get it off your chest, and used the first word that rhymed that came into your head... Try freeverse, sometimes it can come across better..
Thanks for entering and good luck
Faerie - Site Greeter
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Welcome to AllPoetry
And thanks for entering. The pain of your write speaks loud and clear. It is hard to deal with some things that happen with some of the significant relationships in our lives.
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Thanks for entering
This poem is filled with so much hurt and one cannot say hatred, but it does feel awfully close, towards your mother. This is one of those things one has to learn to come to terms with and forgive to be able to truly move on in life. I had something similar with my dad, so I truly do understand.
Let the ink flow and your fingers dance
Rosemary
PS - don't forget to place you option in the author notes
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Thank you very much for the entry
This piece is certainly bursting in emotion, poetry is a great way to help release some of the pent up anger, I hope things work out good in the long run, nicely penned. Thank you very much for taking the time to write for and enter our contest. Best wishes and welcome to AllpoetryDove
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Welcome to All Poetry!
Many angry emotions in this and with good reason by the sounds of it. Your imagery is very vivid and I felt these emotions throbbing from the page.
Thanks so much for entering and could you pleases place the option you chose in your author comments.
Gaylene
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